Pyramid

Glory times

Pyramid

Little promises.

Ursa major can be seen tonight.

A thousand masks around me, 

The end of a chase, 

Sheer silence.

So alive, so blue, your dream, my dream.

Stay with me…

Reviews

[Robert]

very interesting use of words, very thought provokeing. i really loves how it seems to end before it begins giving you a short glimpse of something and leaveing your mind to find the rest. however i would suggest that you maybe pull it all together a little better. i can tell that it is at night, there are many choices around you then you decide, but the ending is kind of distant from this. i think maybe that if at the begining you tied in something with this person perhasps with saying in the second line "the stars are in his eyes tonight" this i think might pull things together. just a thought, amazing poem, excellent feel and flow.

Robert

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:O bestill my heart that was niiiice!!!! :D

[Wake Up!]

Very pretty. I like how short it is. This is definatly something I would read again. I'm jealous. I wish I could write like you :p

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

how beautifully presented and inlaid with gentle mystery like the pyramids of self ~

[The Cute 1]

i really like this