Shadow of Myself

I feel like a shadow,
Just a shadow in the sea of people,
Watching myself through my own eyes.
Unable to control what I do, what I see,
I'm just a shadow living inside my own body.
Surrounded by the murmuring of the world,
Listening to hum of the crowd,
Trying to fit in while standing out.
I am a shadow unable to get out.
Unable to be myself,
I am a shadow inside my own body.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

This poem really exposes how I am sure a lot of people feel about fitting into society. Some don't find themselves, others do/others don a mask just to fit in and deny their true selves to shine through. This piece really makes you think about those who struggle to find themselves and beggars the question of 'how many people are out there just hiding behind the mask?'

I liked this piece.

Mark.

[Alice Maria]

Thank you. That's exactly how I felt writing this poem.

[Lavi]

This is such a descriptive piece despite its repetitive nature. It's also very true, exposing how many feel when trying to go their own way but have to fight being herded into a crowd that look alike and are basically just a moving mass of people rather than the individual identity of the persons within. Thanks for sharing. Very intuitive.

[Alice Maria]

Thankyou for your review.

[Maria]

Truly heartfelt, love how you expressed it. Well done.

[Alice Maria]

Thankyou. Writing is how I express myself.

[Im His Daughter]

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[Alice Maria]

Thankyou so much.

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

it got me thinking of me.....nice poem though

[Alice Maria]

Thankyou. I wrote this poem as a reflection of how I see myself.

[Paul Bell]

I suppose you need to ask yourself. What sect do you want to fit into. Just remember, if you're feeling that way, you'll probably find the person standing beside you feels the same.

[Alice Maria]

I suppose you're right.

[Lavi]

No, I'd say make your own section. Trust your instincts, your feelings are identifying there's something missing, now its up to you do decide where you move from there. Self-reflections are always insightful, kind of like dreams.

[Poetic License]

LOVED it! Love the vulnerability and the openness. Been there and feel like that more days that naught! This piece feels so genuine to me.

"Trying to fit in while standing out. " - This - so this. I read this and thought to myself, another round peg trying to fit in a square hole. It's good to know there are other round pegs out there.

Well done.

[Alice Maria]

Thank you so much

[Uranus]

Exactly how I'm feeling every moment. Loved it.

[Alice Maria]

Thankyou I feel like this very often as well.

[Einstein Noodle]

again..very relatable state we all go through ..invisible in a crowd ..we speak and its as if our voice drifts away on some other wavelength .. some very real tragedies can occur as a result of this disconnection ..depression creeping in as a viper :{ very dangerous times when our sense of self even seems to be dissolving .. this is a similar theme as your "Outsider" I believe ... such an important stage of our lives .. to "find our spot" .. to "fit in" .. to claim our self :)
E.

[Alice Maria]

Yes, I'm still trying to find myself. Thankyou...

[Einstein Noodle]

aren't we all ;)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Haunting and beautifully metaphoric. Isolation/alienation in the midst of many so well-expressed. Rhythmic and lyrical. Will she burst out into the sun?? I so hope she will!!

[Alice Maria]

Thankyou. I hope so too. 😄