Dream Girl

Six word story practice in brevity.

We finally met at her funeral.

Author's Note

Written for a six-word story contest.

Reviews

[Nicole Schuster]

Scrolling through the reviews already posted to this work, I see that they say the same things that I would have. I love this. It can be taken so many different ways, and that's what's so interesting about it. The concept of loving but meeting too late is incredibly deep and thoughtful, and completely entrancing. Beautiful, beautiful work. Thanks for entering my contest. Congrats on second place :)

[Takeshi Yamada]

Thank you, Nicole! Without your contest, I would never have been inspired to write this. Much gratitude.

[θεά]

Pithy and poignant. Solemn and succinct.

[Takeshi Yamada]

Thank you, Mallika! :)

[Shannon]

I appreciate the courage it takes to put something out into the world with this level of ambiguity. Thoroughly enjoyable.

[Takeshi Yamada]

Thank you S. Mi. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Érenn]

The dream's true reality now exposed.

Hey Takeshi been meaning to drop by your page for some time now, but haven't been able to do so until now. Too many writers to read( and review). ^^ Congratulations on placing second in the contest as well. ^^ I like brevity and this one was definitely one of the best writes in brevity I have come across. Many things could be meant with this one. My interpretation is expressed in that six word story mentioned above. I will stop by to read more of your works soon. Just wanted to read one of your works to begin with, Thank you for sharing. ^^

[Takeshi Yamada]

Errenn, interesting take on this prompt. You took it a step further than I did when I wrote it, which is awesome! Maybe she came to him in his dream? Did I understand where you were going with this? :) Thanks for contributing to the fun.

[Érenn]

You definitely are ^^

[Érenn]

I'd say what could be the rosy dream till then, suddenly revealing the fangs of a never-ending night mare.

[Autonomous]

That awkward moment, Propose in front of her family to see what they say. Love the story, kept me intrigued from beginning to end. I read that you placed second so that's cool...let me awkwardly end this review

[Takeshi Yamada]

Haha...Zwsed, your comment made me laugh. Glad that I keep the intensity up. Would have hated to lose you at word 3 or 4. What a shame that would have been, though you would have had a much happier story. ;)

[Robert Parlange]

That's why I avoid funerals. I don't want to fall in love with corpses. Although, I have practiced necrophilia in the past. Well, symbolically, actually.

[Takeshi Yamada]

Robert, sorry for the long delay! I'm glad you've kept your necrophilia in the abstract. :P Also, thank you for recommending my writing to M. L. Franchello. She's quite the writer! We're helping each other improve our work. Cheers, Takeshi

[Blackheart]

Those six words said a hundred words. Really loved this concept of writing

[Takeshi Yamada]

Hi Blackheart! Thank you, it was a challenge to use so few words. I'm glad you enjoyed how it turned out, though I can't take credit for the concept. Thanks to Nicole Schuster for the contest.

[Scrap]

Love comes alive as breath leaves.

[Takeshi Yamada]

Scrap, very nice!

[Writing Angel]

honestly six words say alot..and in my mind i can see a whole story..great job

[Takeshi Yamada]

Thank you, Destini. I'm glad you enjoyed this micro story. :)

[Samuel Dickens]

Yikes! It's a bit late, isn't it? Better get some of her dna and put it on ice.

[Takeshi Yamada]

"Would a clone be so beautiful?" (Oooh...this could be read in not quite the nuance I intended)
read more"Would a clone be so beautiful?" (Oooh...this could be read in not quite the nuance I intended)

Thanks for stopping by, Samuel! Pleasure to have you.