My kind of girl.

My kind of girl.

A Poem by Tabitha t
"

what I look for in a girlfriend.

"

I want a girl.

with the sweetest of smiles.

whos light can be seen for miles.

You dont need makeup

I already think you are great.

Who doesnt believe in the word hate.

 

I want a girl.

who knows who she is.

a leader so true.

of course she has to look good in blue.

 

She will run in a field of green.

she is never mean.

She stole my hat. a chase ensued.

just to bargain with a kiss.

 

We dont have to act our age.

swing and games.

we will have our own silly names.

 

I can be cuddle bear

she will be my lady

lovely and fair.

Thats my kind of girl.

© 2012 Tabitha t


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It's beautiful.. Simple, honest.. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very good and beautifully spoken :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


A beautiful peace of poetry, enjoyed reading your writing :}

Posted 12 Years Ago


The characterizations you speak of are well worth searching for. You have a virtuous nature to your writing that is admirable. Nice penning.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love it it has character

Posted 12 Years Ago


Tabitha t

12 Years Ago

thanks!
Toni Blackerby

12 Years Ago

ur welcome
The meter is a little off, but if I think of it more as free-form poetry, I don't have as big an issue with it. I'm not sure if you were going for a specific meter, but if you were, you may want to revise some lines so it flows a bit more smoothly.
Some more consistent capitalization schemes would help as well.
I liked the diction of the piece. It's sweet and almost naive at times. It reminds me of the voice of a younger person looking for their dream princess in a way.
It's a cute poem. I liked it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I agree with JustJenn. You've got something but maybe if you read it aloud to yourself you will notice the meter. There is an innocence and almost naivety which I love. You are onto something. Well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


nice ^^
really sweet and not stereotypical :D I like it ^^

Posted 12 Years Ago


It could be a great poem, but the meter is not there. Not that your idea isn't good, just need to get a flow going here. Just constructive critiszm.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

simple statement done adorably. great write!!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Tabitha t

Pigeon Forge, TN



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I am 21. I am in a commited lesbian relationship. I am a novelist. still struggling. (obviously) The novel I am working on completing right now is totally consuming my tie and I love every minute .. more..

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