And There was None

Resentments are climbing, jealousy is threatening to topple me over.

I wish I could write
as beautifully as she does.
Her mind works in pieces
binding each other until
the edges fit together.
My writing is of potpourri
small and insignificant.

Unlike hers.

She writes thoughts 
eloquently
  unfeigned
    untouched
       indiscreet.
Such vivid imagery whilst I
Fail to brighten up this 
   tiny
     minuscule
world I have. 
I wish
just once
  let me please
just write

as beautifully as she does.

Author's Note

Please don't think I'm a horrid person. I'm jealous of talented writers, but I'd never envy them. Review please! Thank you!

Reviews

[DrD]

No need to be jealous. You have revealed a diversity of your work that screams of originality. You do not leave us hanging, wondering what it was all about and trying to fit it into our own experiences. You tell it how it is and do it boldly without subterfuge. I like your work and will be back to see more of it.

[Phillitup]

I often feel this way too. Actually, a lot of writers do. Added with the fact that we never think of our writing correctly. Some writers boost their writing up way to high. Others shove it down way to low. Like you. Your very talented, as clearly expressed by this intriguing poem. Great job! Self expression is important!

[Dylan Evans]

Emotional, but you shouldn't be so harsh on your writing.
I've read a few of your poems now and as a collective they are all beautifully laid out and expressed and really shows your own style.

[Markus Anthony]

This is a beautiful poem jaja. it captivates something inside me too. I share the same sentiments to the speaker. but i believe that writes should be secured, and put their souls on what they write. this is apparently the best example.,

[Hanakuso]

Some people have just the talent to write so beautifully (check out www.iwrotethisforyou.me). He inspired me a lot to write, that simplicity at times could be beauty in itself. Thank you, Mark!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i think this is beautifully expressed. nothing to be jealous of. be happy with you. i have only a small criticism and that concerns the choice of words you enlarged. while it made for an interesting look, i didn't understand why they were emphasized. keep writing. don't be concerned about how others write. be yourself. keep writing.

[Hanakuso]

Thank you! This is just my personal musing, really. As for the strange emphasis, I thought it would add some oomph, but I really didn't consider which words. It looks kind of messy, haha. I appreciate the feedback!

[marie]

this reminds me of how i feel to my friends their work shines of brilliance, and mine.... well it leaves much to be desired

[zainul]

Very lovely and crystal clear feeling.
You may feel jealous about her performance but she may not be jealous of you.
I am not familiar with her work,but I have read yours.
It is wonderful.
I have found site very helpful for the writers.
There are only few cynic or vindictive.
The majority are supportive of others' works.
Keep your jealousy as a sports person.
Congratulations!!!
100/100

[Imagine Blade]

Until I read the last line, I thought it was about LOVE!
The feelings in each line were genuine.

Envy and jealousy literally leaked from the words and though it was the good kind of jealousy.

Sometimes, it makes me jealous about how other writers can captivate readers easily. Like most light novel writers in Japan have eccentric but imaginative writing styles and I just want a writing style like that too!

I know how you feel. ^^

[Hanakuso]

Haha, I know it appeared sort of confusing at first. It's nice to know that having negative thoughts can also bring out the good type of jealousy, as you claimed. Thank you!

[Lunette Lariz]

All writers have their own way of writing, but yes, sometimes, we cannot help but feel jealous of other writers that are more fluent than us. But one shouldn't stick on that, for your mind works very differently from others. Sometimes, they cannot write a particular thing which you can without any difficulty. Well, I must say that your words are creative enough to tell your emotions about your chosen theme. :)

[beautiful dreamer]

hey now! you write way beautifully! i'm glad you don't envy that would be bad! i like this poem i feel like this sometimes but the truth is everyone writes beautifully in their own way! keep writing your great! :)