HEY there!

tell me everything!

 

HEY there

I keep knocking on my head

Wondering where I have gone

INSANE

 

HEY there

SIRI!!!!!

Wake up boy

Please stop pretending

To be

INSANE

 

PLEASE STOP TALKING

 

I’ve lost leverage

My mind reaches hights

Of new pressure

MalFUnCtioning

Twitches of PURE pleasure

 

Guess what

 

I decided

to get lost in my mind…tonight?

for the last time…HA HA yeah right

stop paying attention

to the senses  

that keep me stuck in reality

 

I break down

Tears melt personality

Pain reminds me of fear

I guess I cant express

My immortality

 

I use pillows

To drown out 

Screams

And what not

Tell myself

The drugs

DO NOT

Inject poison

 

Living proof

I got FUCKED

Mind raped

And lost alone

 

The only thing

That keeps me sane

Is pain

Pain reminds me of fear

OUCH

Reminds me im living

In an endless dream

 

Where screams come out with out giving

And death is only the beginning

 

Reviews

[Laura Nikkinen]

I'm smiling. For some weird reason it's not the most appropriate thing do be doing after reading this poem (song?) of yours. I can see the spiritual side to this (in fact, this is probably one of the most spiritual poems I've read on here, if that's how I wanna read it... filter your words), and I can see the substances ( reality,whatever that is.. different for everyone, reason... the worst drugs people are addicted to in this world, the scariest ones to be tripping on too) speaking as well, or a very restless mind.

I like how chirpy you made it in a way (the tempo, rhythm... chirpy or aggressive, don't really know, I'm so indecisive), and how "dark" (fyi.. .hate the word dark, how about just humane) it is at the same time... humanely raw, and how out of place that emotion is after reading into the actual words, the whole work is like a happy tear, if that makes any sense.. or an unhappy smile. How about that.

I'll stop taking your time now.

[DaGirlNxtDoor]

wow! awesome poem...wow! *all i can say*

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

A very good poem...well written
Great Job

[Kiara]

hooked from the start : )
and i must say you are
very good at intrguing the
reader into your spiral
of writing madness!
(in a good way)
thanks for sharing!
-arabella

[sarah]

thanks for the review:]

you're also a really good writer.
i love this poem, and unfortunately can relate.

i like this beginning, how you convey that feeling, of how difficult it is its at times to decifer whether your sane/ insane, or just simply pretending, or if sanity/ insanity actually ever existed in your mind or anyone elses.

but really...who can tell us whether we are sane or not?
the great freud to me seemed pretty ludicris.
thus, sanity only exists to the beholder.


and i like the way you were able to capture that.
and the emotion of falling.


i assume this is regarding drugs? haha

[CLUTZ]

HELLO!!! I LOVE THIS!!! pain is good, don't know why but it is. not very good at reviews but i will do my best and tell u what i feel. i like this. and that is all i will say.

[J.Black]

Holy F**k Siri!
This just made me feel for you, a whole lot!
I am totally diggin' the lines:

"Living proof
I got FUCKED
Mind raped
And lost alone"

This is so powerful, strong, and dark.
Actually im diggin' alot of lines right now as I go back and read them over and over.
Let's just say this is one of my favourite poems, damn.
You are a brilliant writer who is full of emotion, and it sure in hell shows.

Just calm down abit though, I cant date a psyco LOL!

[caitlin]

wow tihs is very good the best poem ever

[Mizu1]

cute^_^

[Enigma]

WOW!! That was on of the most powerful and dark pieces of poetry I've ever read. When started, it continued on it's own pace and I found it quite dificult to go along with it.
*phew*
That was really awesome. The way you've framed it and simpky potrayed all your feelings, gosh! You're really good at this. You have the reader hooked on with this write.
Just a suggestion. Calm down and dont hurt yourself, ok? ^_^
(Hoping that this wasn't a real life experience)
Fantastic write!! Vey well written!! GREAT JOB!! ...keep writing :)

[Caramel Gold]

I decided

to get lost in my mind�tonight?

for the last time�HA HA yeah right

stop paying attention

to the senses

that keep me stuck in reality

... my favorite part, very nicely written, love it!