HEY there!

tell me everything!

 

HEY there

I keep knocking on my head

Wondering where I have gone

INSANE

 

HEY there

SIRI!!!!!

Wake up boy

Please stop pretending

To be

INSANE

 

PLEASE STOP TALKING

 

I’ve lost leverage

My mind reaches hights

Of new pressure

MalFUnCtioning

Twitches of PURE pleasure

 

Guess what

 

I decided

to get lost in my mind…tonight?

for the last time…HA HA yeah right

stop paying attention

to the senses  

that keep me stuck in reality

 

I break down

Tears melt personality

Pain reminds me of fear

I guess I cant express

My immortality

 

I use pillows

To drown out 

Screams

And what not

Tell myself

The drugs

DO NOT

Inject poison

 

Living proof

I got FUCKED

Mind raped

And lost alone

 

The only thing

That keeps me sane

Is pain

Pain reminds me of fear

OUCH

Reminds me im living

In an endless dream

 

Where screams come out with out giving

And death is only the beginning

 

Reviews

[Laura Nikkinen]

I'm smiling. For some weird reason it's not the most appropriate thing do be doing after reading this poem (song?) of yours. I can see the spiritual side to this (in fact, this is probably one of the most spiritual poems I've read on here, if that's how I wanna read it... filter your words), and I can see the substances ( reality,whatever that is.. different for everyone, reason... the worst drugs people are addicted to in this world, the scariest ones to be tripping on too) speaking as well, or a very restless mind.

I like how chirpy you made it in a way (the tempo, rhythm... chirpy or aggressive, don't really know, I'm so indecisive), and how "dark" (fyi.. .hate the word dark, how about just humane) it is at the same time... humanely raw, and how out of place that emotion is after reading into the actual words, the whole work is like a happy tear, if that makes any sense.. or an unhappy smile. How about that.

I'll stop taking your time now.

[A.Lee]

Nice write! I like the way it charges through all the way to the end. Dramatic and slightly scary.

[deeps]

This is quite the powerful read here.
I like this, very well written, so full of emotion.

[The Wave]

"I decided
to get lost in my mind…tonight?
for the last time…HA HA yeah right..."

knowing what you were talking about before reading this helped paint a clearer picture for me...

just want to add that the poem itself is written well.. and i really felt your words

[itsjustme]

very interesting piece my first impression was that this poem was lighthearted and enjoyably funny. as i read on as you the writer must know your poem got much darker and complex. i enjoyed the play with CaPs :) alright so yea...great write

[Rainbow Skank]

i like this it's cool i guess!!!!!

[BlackRose]

In the first couple of lines, my impulse was to laugh. but when i got farther, i saw that it was about something much more serious and deep. a statement about insanity. It was cool. I liked it.

[Keli Renee]

Oh boy. You just get better and better, huh?
I can relate 100% to this.
Be expecting more reviews from me in your future.
Your just too damned good at what you do for me to stop reading now.

[Holly]

That's kind of rough. In my own opinion, of who cares what I think but I care what I think so I'm going to tell you; this whole piece is just one big code for someone tormented and I didn't really get the poem. I did however, definitely sense some way dark undertones.That was very expressive and creative in ways, thanks for the read.

[..R.I.P..]

Wow! I have honestly never read such a powerful and dark piece of poetry before! The way you put the whole thing together was just AMAZING! You had me hooked from the very start, something I have come to expect from all of your writings. This was such a fantastic write! You did an EXCELLENT job!!! I've come to really enjoy reading your stuff.
~Kathleen

[talulu love]

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! awesome love the rhyming...and how u put the whole thing 2gether...good one...this has 2 do with drug usage rite,,,if yea then awesome wake up call 2 urself....hahahaha Wake up...no one can reallly stop u but urself...good one