HEY there!

tell me everything!

 

HEY there

I keep knocking on my head

Wondering where I have gone

INSANE

 

HEY there

SIRI!!!!!

Wake up boy

Please stop pretending

To be

INSANE

 

PLEASE STOP TALKING

 

I’ve lost leverage

My mind reaches hights

Of new pressure

MalFUnCtioning

Twitches of PURE pleasure

 

Guess what

 

I decided

to get lost in my mind…tonight?

for the last time…HA HA yeah right

stop paying attention

to the senses  

that keep me stuck in reality

 

I break down

Tears melt personality

Pain reminds me of fear

I guess I cant express

My immortality

 

I use pillows

To drown out 

Screams

And what not

Tell myself

The drugs

DO NOT

Inject poison

 

Living proof

I got FUCKED

Mind raped

And lost alone

 

The only thing

That keeps me sane

Is pain

Pain reminds me of fear

OUCH

Reminds me im living

In an endless dream

 

Where screams come out with out giving

And death is only the beginning

 

Reviews

[Laura Nikkinen]

I'm smiling. For some weird reason it's not the most appropriate thing do be doing after reading this poem (song?) of yours. I can see the spiritual side to this (in fact, this is probably one of the most spiritual poems I've read on here, if that's how I wanna read it... filter your words), and I can see the substances ( reality,whatever that is.. different for everyone, reason... the worst drugs people are addicted to in this world, the scariest ones to be tripping on too) speaking as well, or a very restless mind.

I like how chirpy you made it in a way (the tempo, rhythm... chirpy or aggressive, don't really know, I'm so indecisive), and how "dark" (fyi.. .hate the word dark, how about just humane) it is at the same time... humanely raw, and how out of place that emotion is after reading into the actual words, the whole work is like a happy tear, if that makes any sense.. or an unhappy smile. How about that.

I'll stop taking your time now.

[AmateurWriter01]

This was excellent. Your poems always surprise me every time I read them. I wish I had your talent for this stuff. I really hope you come back and start writing more stuff for us.

[luna11]

This so poem sounds so cheerful when really it is not.
I like the way you wrote MalFUnCtioning. It sort of adds to the craziness of the poem.
To be honest, this poem scared me a little. :D
I love it though.
Well written.
xx

[Becky C Strukamp]

Pain Pain..I read pain in this...a lot...sometimes pain is the only thing that reminds us we are alive...I get it!! Nice job!!

[Lily Mae]

A nice powerhouse.. I love it.. Great write..x

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

o.o very interesting, nice job! ^.^

[⌈☾Star At M..]

i like the onomatopoeias
but nice...

[sentimental~ galore]

i liked the onomatopoeias you used in your poem, well written. Their was such ease and quickness in your thought that it creates a beautiful flow. i especially was lured in in the second half, i liked when you put your whole hearted emotion into it.

[Stammers]

I break down
Tears melt personality
Pain reminds me of fear
I guess I cant express
My immortality - I'm in love with those lines.

Clear from this read you've got a really distinct style, this is intelligent, your voice is allowed to speak so much you get right into the readers face and sort of chatter, it's gripping, kept me reading. Really good write.

[clauds294]

this is awesome! I like the style and also thanks for posting it on my group!! :D keep writing cause for some reason I smile at your work lol