with you

with you im complete

with you i don't have to be a differnt person

with you im strong

with you i always have someone

 

 

with out you im depressed

with out you there is not point in life

with out you i have no light in my life

with out you i have no love in my life

 

i love you becasue your the light of my life

i love you becasue you care about me

i love you becasue your you

 

Reviews

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

brings out the feelings for someone truely special. i love it.

[x]

A simple straight forward write. The design of the layout was interesting and it's nice to have some thought put into artistic creation along with the words. The message was forthright and I enjoyed it. All it says is that with love....there is life and ain't that the truth.
Well done and keep up the good work....

[Neversee]

Syrus keep writing and writing. Then you'll crave new ways to say more about how you feel. You are definitely on your way.

[Koeseki]

Good, save that there is a need to smooth over your syllable synchronization, it will make the poem sink in smoother and the meter easier. If you wish to take the opposite approach, then I suggest a more contrasting syllable pattern. Don't be afraid of the extremes.

[Dillon Cotter]

syrus, you put your feelings into this which made is true and ravishing. i like the honesty and balance of what you desire with your life and love.

-will