[ In War, in Death, in Sacrifice ]

"The hands that help are better far than lips that pray."
                                -Robert G. Ingersoll

' [ in war, in death, in sacrifice ] ,
Death comes for us all.
Death is the end,
The curtain will fall.
Just wait, my friend.

We'll bear our sins,
and we'll take it in
where the sinners crawl
death begins

However we breed,
we're a race of greed.
Forsaken soldiers out there,
pulls the trigger for our sake,
with their own lives at stake

Betrayal kills the leader,
foolishness starts the war.
War breeds the bleeder.
whose kills you'll stand for

Because,
you can be a King
or a street sweeper,
but everybody dances,
with the Grim Reaper.

Author's Note

Just wanted to try writing a poem, and now I've done it, lawl. Chances are, this will be the only one I'll ever write. I'm no poet.

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Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Well, you are quite skilled at this sort of writing. I've fallen in love with every word (though I dare say you could use some honing) and that is a difficult task to achieve considering the little over-pessimistic, judgmental f**k that I am. Well done.

[Zeph]

haha, thanks :P

[Salar Majak]

wow it's amazing zeph!!, i love it, it has a taste of darkness to it, makes it glows, you SHOULD write more poetry you are talented.
oh and i'm Becca from MS XD

[Zeph]

Thanks :D

[InkAngelXIII]

I'm no poet myself and I personally like it, not because it has such a deep meaning or that its philosophical or anything, but because I can look at and get the meaning behind it without much difficulty like other poems and that is what I like. So even if you don't make another one I can enjoy this one, thank you.

[Lee]

For someone who doesnt see themself a poet, this is indeed something decently well written. While you may not see meaning or point behind your words, others will. As have I. But perhaps my reason for liking this piece so much (and appreciating its tone and diction) is simply due to my current perspective towards society..

With any regards, this is Good
And I hope you do write another.

[Bluefire]

Love it! This is an instant favorite. Good job!

[DeusExMachinima]

One of the better things you've written.
It really shows a pessimistic regard of the human as a whole and the inevitable death that will come to everything that lives.
I like it.

[Lino Rie]

I think it was very creative and inspiring unlike my writing. I just do this to build my confadince up.

[Emilie Louise]

wow i'm sad to read you don't want to write another poem because this one is beautiful, so well written.

[Pax]

Your rhyming is brilliant, thats the key for being a poet.. but then I'm not a master as well... Its seems like you based this on a story of yours... Great write!!!

[Megan Rose]

;lhgfkjh;lgfdk this is good Y U NO THINK SO?!

But, in all seriousness, it really is xD It would make an awesome song!~