Never give up

Maybe... you will like this writing

The never give up rage flows within me

venomously blurring my sight... forging swords like urges

that thorn sharply, sharpened with acid like an on-going corrosion

of steel-bars with overflowing blood of a caged monster....

Then stand like it's my first stand in ding dong battles

triumphing routinely like rewinding scenes in movie spider-man...

agile, climbing concrete wall belly-bared in snake style positions

As all borders break loose in my remote tame...

cajoling legs following large stumps footsteps flamboyantly

like a crème de la crème craving for more cream of success

Then grasp tranquillity with scary scarred hands... followed by

incommunicado smiles of coming in elite positions over tribulations.

Trepidation filled, foreseeing the near zoomed future

As Muhammad...

A "blessings unto him

and finally I gather my thoughts around

in realisation

that I never gave up.

Reviews

[PaulB]

Excellent poem, really enjoyed how you use vocabulary to paint a vivid picture. Couple of minor points. First verse second line, 'forging sords' - I think you meant 'swords'? Second verse first line. The phrase 'ding dong' felt out of place considering your elegant use of words in the rest of the poem. Otherwise, epic stuff.

[The earth (Titan maphaha)]

splendid review... I wrote it trying to write using a writing style I admirer so much... and thank you for pointing out those...... Titan

[Sharmila Roy Ghosal]

A beautiful poem . Great to read.

[The earth (Titan maphaha)]

Thank you Sharmila........

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

That is a great poem it needs me to read again tonight after my day to see the meaning but I love it to bits

[The earth (Titan maphaha)]

thanks for stopping by