To Love and To Loose

this is a poem i wrote about my horse. it didnt really happen, i thought of it while we were on a trail. its a thought about a tragic ending to a great friend and what kind of impact it could have on someone.

 

today, i lost my best friend.

i thought we would be together to the end.

i wish i had told her how i felt.

what our friendship meant to me day in and day out.

it was a wet day that day.

we went out after the rain had delayed.

we were having fun and acting free.

until we decided to jump a tree (a fallen tree btw.)

we flew over it with a giant leap.

she didnt even make a peep.

when it happened,

it was like a dream.

one that i have had many times after

that always made me scream.

when we landed, something was wrong.

i looked below

her legs were gone. (meaning she fell.)

we hit the ground with a thud.

we were greeted by rocks and mud.

i then heard a crack and felt something warm.

blood trickeled down my cheek

and a small pool formed.

while darkness was closing around me

i looked to my left.

my friend was there taking her last breath.

i said her name

with no response.

and watched her die right on the spot.

she had broken her leg and her neck.

had a broken hip and was all wet.

the rain poored down and before i closed my eyes,

i looked to my friend and said my goodbyes.

when i awoke,

there was nurse

she smiled and say

'hello little girl'

i asked what had happened

she said it was tragic.

i remembered the scene

and began to panic.

my friend was dead

and i was alive.

my only friend gone- why did i survive?

i wanted to be with her

up in the sky.

i asked god the reason,

but he didnt say why.

i miss her a lot

not a day goes by

that i dont think of her,

and i dont cry.

nothings the same

its all not right.

i am still haunted by the events of that night.

Author's Note

please ignore the grammar issues and un-capitalization. i hope you like it, and tell me what you think :)

Reviews

[lindsay]

A truly incredible write! You held my attention the entire and really felt for you. Great Job!

[Surrealstorm]

This is a very sad poem. It pulled the reader in and made them feel what the character was feeling. I also liked the rhyme scheme, it's not easy to have that many lines rhyme and still tell the story so well. Excellent write!

[TheKaylaPup]

If it had happened I've of cried, If I thought it had happened I've of cried.... It's a great poem...full of emotion... I hope nothing like this never does happen to you *knock on wood*

[Dominic Rosales]

I think it is increduluos
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this is actually the best poem i have read on the site (although I just signed up about three hours ago lol)