It Wasn't Your Time.

A poem for a little girl I knew.. She died at 7 from cancer. She fought since she was born when her life was only supposed to last 6 months. RIP Hunter..

When you first woke up, 

You were already broken.

6 months was all that filled your cup.

You denied the gates of Heaven when they opened.

You were a sister and daughter.

Hunter, that was your name.

You never gave up, you were a fighter.

You told God he couldn't take you when he came.

You proved them wrong by 7 years,

But that still wasn't your time.

I remember you, a girl with no fears.

You shouldn't have left in your prime.

Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

A very touching and powerful piece of poetry. This one started to bring tears to my eyes. I knew some kids with cancer, and it isn't fair that they would have to go through something so terrifying. The fact that little girl lasted all that time is a testament to the power of her spirit. You have done her justice with this poem. I know that somewhere in Heaven she is smiling at you.

[Urja Gokani]

really touching at the end of it i had a tear rolling down my cheek i am sorry for your loss but the past is gone and you have to forget her and live your life amazingly written keep it up !!

[Fabric Pulse]

The empathy drips from every word. It's a good thing for you to keep of remembrance. It's tragedy, but with a tinge of hope in it for living your life.

[(Loveless)]

wow wonderful touching beautiful yet sorrowful poem i liked it tho it just uses such truth that u want to keep reading keep up the writing

[Brook]

This poem, though short, carries a heavy burden and a lot of meaning. Much like the short life of this brave little girl, in a way. You have done her justice with these beautifully chosen words and carefully sculpted rhythm. Every word had a purpose and every sentence was chilling, haunting, awe-inspiring. The words of the second stanza carefully spell out how unique this girl was, even in her weakened state - how she fought against even God, how she struggled to stay alive even at the hardest times. And the line "You proved them wrong by 7 years" is so full of meaning that it wields the power to strike someone to the soul. It makes the girl who is now just a memory a kind of warrior, because it gives the feeling of her immense strength despite having been told all her life that she had only a little longer left.

Very haunting and beautiful. RIP, Hunter.

[Nat.]

This is very good :) and it was really good to read since i knew what you were talking about, only because you shared it in english class.

[SpokenWord]

Very beautiful poema nd dedication to such a positive and brave soul.

[theunionisloud]

Beautiful and touching. I'm sorry for your loss.

I have to wonder if Hunter was her real name, or you chose the name to show she was a go-getter. What an appropriate name.

Beautifully done.

[Mark C. Jackson]

a powerful legacy to brave young girl . . .

[GamingGal]

Pros: Hmm, that's touching. I like the way you put the emotions and whatnot in words. Sometimes it's hard to do that, especially with such a tender subject. But I like how you find a spark of happiness in that she fought and had a strong spirit. A glimmer of hope, if you will.

Cons: None.

Overall: Sad, touching, beautiful.

[Dilan Gray]

This gave me goosebumps! I loved the line "You proved them wrong by 7 years". This poem was so sad but beautiful! I loved it!