The Place.

Please review, my first poem with a syllable scheme.

To anyone listening to my words.(10)
I have something to say (6)
You may find me silly, or simply absurd. (11)
I need to say it without a delay. (10)

There is a place too far away from us. (10)
It's not here nor there, swear. (6)
Maybe it doesn't even really exist. (11)
I've seen it once before, the place was rare. (10)

It's a place that anything happens dear. (10)
This place we can't feel hate. (6)
I know it has to be true, this place I've seen. (11)
Please, come with me darling, accept our fate. (10)

My utopia is perfect, it's true. (10)
Nothing to make you mope. (6)
Thats what the human race truly needs, you see. (11)
After slumber, I'll wake here, I have hope. (10) 

Author's Note

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Reviews

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you sent me a read request for this one, so i decided to check it out for you. i like this one, i like the last stanza the best. "After slumber, I'll wake up here, I have hope." love that line by the way. once again, you take the depressing ideas and understanding, and somehow also manage to give them reason to believe

[Somer]

Awe this was great! Good job on the syllable count, you did a good job. Be proud of yourself ! Very well written :)

[Arabdha]

wow..sounds like an amazing place..liked this one a lot..specially how you end it...with a hopeful note..keep writing !!

Nice read , technically sound and also very nice in content , specially since I am obsessed with rhyming when it comes to poetry .