My Imagination, don't ever leave.

1st Block, Creative Writing.. Not much writing, and so I wrote.

All I feell is hopeful.

I feel all the promise.

Our would could be beautiful,

but it needs something honest.

All we need is emotion.

Something real people feel.

Many beings have the notion,

but need too make a deal.

All our lives we'll be searching.

I'm not sure what we need too find. 

Sometimes what we desire is lurking.

Yet, we all live so blind.

All the masses of souls are losing hope.

They're all searching for a dream.

They're imagination washes away with soap.

I hope greatly that never happens too me.

So, for now I'll write and get it out.

I'll let myself be free.

I will never have a single doubt.

No one can take away from me.

Author's Note

Tell me how you feel. (: I need feedback.

Reviews

[Arabdha]

"losing hope..imagination wahes away with soap...I will never have a single doubt.
No one can take away from me.."..i guess this is about someone striving to hold their own against a world that lacks creativity and hence doesn't make you feel welcome..i can relate to that..good wrting..again!!

[Rossen]

"The right brain is terrible thing to waste"
My favorite subject to think about.
Almost to the point of obsession.
creative juices flow in this cafe'
You smith words well,
give um hell!

[Coyote Poetry]

"All we need is emotion.
Something real people feel."
You are very wise. Your words are true. We need to feel alive. Freedom and hope is appreciated when it is gone. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sydney Evans]

I'm sorry I keep putting the wrong "to".
Thank you for your feedback, I want too publish my poetry sometime soon.. But I wasn't sure if I could appeal too others emotions to where they'd want to read it.. So I thought his site could help me find out. (:

[GamingGal]

Pros: Ah, this is quite pretty :) You're rhyme scheme is nice. I usually opt for ABAC rhyming, but lately things have been from the heart and rhyming just wasn't in the cards. I love the story it tells, absolutely adore it. The stanzas are all the same length, as well as most of the lines, which just adds to the perfect flow here. And I'm adoring that last stanza. It's delightful.

Cons: None, except you have the wrong form of "to" in the second stanza, last line. But we all make mistakes.

Overall: I really do like this. It's pretty :)