Pull Me Down.

I don't think this is my best, and I was questioning even posting it..please review. :)

I am laying,

On this cloud.

Loving the soft, white nothingness..

Enjoying the concept

Of happiness.

 

But of course;

My cloud turns black.

I feel a rock under me,

Getting heavier by the second.

So gravity shoves me down,

Connecting sky to ground.

My happy cloud,

Is nowhere to be found.

 

You now worry me,

Instead of bringing joy..

 You are my gravity.

 

Author's Note

Please review!

Reviews

[Immortal1967]

Wow very deep. We all need to be grounded from time to time. Good job :D

[Dani]

"So gravity shoves me down, connecting sky to ground."

This is a good poem, I like it.

[PadfootBlack]

Wow! This was really great! Fantastic job, very smooth!

[Brandon]

this was fantastic it had a beautiful flow keep up the good work



100/100

[Love Is Dead]

very nice. i love the flow to this.

"My happy cloud,

Is nowhere to be found.



You now worry me,

Instead of bringing joy..

You are my gravity. " love the ending! that was a perfect line