Experiencing you

This is about a person that describes on how he/she found his/her happiness on someone.

When I first laid my eyes on you

I am already struck with your charm

 

When I first met you

I can't explain what I am feeling for you

 

When I am with you

I want the time to stop

 

When you first kissed me

I want to reminisce it every single day

 

When I finally have you

I can't wish for more I am blessed

 

When you hurt me

It's like theres no world left for me and died

 

But when you serenade me

Trying your best to win me back

 

It feels like I'm on a paradise

It feels like I'm on heaven

 

Really touch and really in love

Knowing that your ready to sacrifice everything for me

 

I realized that I never stop loving you

Even though you hurt me

 

I never regret that I loved you

Perhaps I'm thankful on having you

 

Because with you I find the true happiness

That everybody's searching for

Author's Note

i know there are wrong grammars here and I apologized for that. Leave me your comments about this piece. Thanks for the time.

Reviews

[Joseph - Michael]

No worries about the grammars and such, you see, in the world of poetry, no such things as perfect writings, just only perfect lines from the heart and soul...

Anyway, this is a real nice piece you've got there, a nice details on "love at first sight" and so on, so it's all good tho...

[Bobby Mc]

I think this is a great poem, especially near the end " I never regret that i loved you", words that ring so true. Keep it up!

[DrumMajorPod]

I love the underlying thought of the poem. I think many people can relate to that--the first time you see "the one," the first time you touch them, or kiss them.. the first time you realize you love them. Awww. It's a very sweet poem, as the first commenter said before me. Great work. =]

[Janyce Helen Van Es]

Yeah, you have the present and past tenses mixed up-need to work on that to make it flow better. A very sweet poem and quite romantic. I'm sure many people can relate to this. I can.