Barmaid

Kind of an irishy sounding ditty, that I'm going to put music to

Barmaid

(c) 2019 

C.C.McInnes

I walked a straight path 

but I still lost my way

The colours of life

started fading to grey

There were those that did blind me 

and led me astray

somehow you showed me a light

Brought back the sunshine and drove off the night 

The devil and me

we was partners in crime

I always expected 

to be doing time

A penniless pauper 

with nary a dime

you somehow set everything right

Brought back the sunshine and drove off the night 

There is a secret 

I want you to know

I love to come see you

when I'm feelin' low

you keep my heart happy 

with the smiles that you throw

You set my spirit alight

You brought back the sunshine and drove off the night

Now I just sit here

and things are so clear

They'd be even clearer 

with just one more beer

Whats that you said?

Closing time's near?

somehow that doesn't seem right

Sit with me darlin' and we'll drink all night

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I could very well hear the Irish folk tune in this. When I was singing along to it, though, I couldn't help but notice the choruses necessitating a "but" at the beginning of them for better transition and power. That's my only critique. Everything else is just brilliant. That ending is fantastic. I can pretty much hear the Dubliners adding this to their repertoire - lol. Well done!

[Misterr Remeat]

Many thanks! I've spent most of the night trying to figure a key that I can sing to

[Misterr Remeat]

Still a work in progress. I have to present it to my "Jam" people. We will make it a sing along song I hope.Thanks for the advice my friend!

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Robert Trakofler]

Those lines do scream for music indeed and I love (chuckling at) the ending lines nice twist! Or do you prefer it neat, mr remeat:)

[Laura Kate]

This has a lovely, bouncy rhythm to it and paints such a nice picture - I love how beer would help the protagonist to see clear ! Amazing how so much hope can be brought back by one person. Laura.

[barleygirl]

You word-paint an honest & respectful view of those who live a restless nightlife existence, sometimes crying on a person's shoulder a dozen times, yet never knowing him/her, outside a tavern. Some may see this as sad camaraderie, but you show how these night prowlers appreciate others along their way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Mrudula Rani]

I loved format of your poem. And the rhyming is beautiful and fills thoughts with pleasant romantic notions. I am sure this poem will be a wonderful song. The relationship between the two is painted in a heart warming perception.

[Lorry]

The humble barmaid, collector of woes and gets better looking each round. What more can you ask, or what better way to spend a night 😀

[Misterr Remeat]

My wife was the inspiration. 30 years in the industry.

[Lorry]

Well that just proves how wonderful she was 😀