Paradise

Team Renfield

Lack of progress was progress
Communication was person to person
No cyber hugs and kisses
No phones to ring at dinner time

No citys were built to clutter up the sky
Small clusters of villages sprang up
Surrounded by woods, plains and coastlines
People stopped to speak to one another

Nature took her course
Population control was hers alone
Only the strongest and healthiest survived
Death walked among the living

The living walked closer to their Creator
Chershing their time with one another
Of two things they were certain
Birth and death what was in between was life

Life was lived to it's fullest
Children were treasured
Taught the truest form of loving and giving
No inconvience of birth

But man de-evolved and split the atom
The world shifted on her axis
And everything was out of balance
Man forgot where he came from and who he was

Forgot there was one greater then he
Set himself up as god
And raped and pilaged all that was good and kind
Until all that was left was a empty shell

Brittle and decaying
Weakly crying out in the throws of death
And man in his infinate wisdom
Believed he could fix what he had done

But all he touched withered and died
Until at long last
Mans destructive life came to a end
Without his touch

The earth turned green again
She blossomed and fruited
Slowly the world again evolved
The waters ran clear

Blue was the sky
Life stretched forth upon the land
Once again man knew his Maker
And the earth in her joy cried

Author's Note

Prompt: Imagine a world where humanity had never bothered to find out about atoms and sub-atomic particles and so on. What would we be using instead? Would we be taking trans-Atlantic zeppelins and still learning cursive in schools? What would it be like?

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

I love a happy ending. While I mostly agree, I do treasure modern medical advances. In fact, if not for them, yours truley wouldn't be here.

[Tina Kline]

I think you did a great job on this, it reads about how some say the cycles of human life on this planet are, we rise up to great technology and then something happens to cause that to collapse then humans start all over again.

[Kelly M.]

Beautiful poem with lots of imaginary! Great write and keep it up!! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The progression of man and the technological advances have been a blessing and a curse... I often would like to go back to simpler times... this is such a wonderful poem. One of your best.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is amazing what man had done in 2500 years to Earth. I like this poem. The earth would be so beautiful and alive wasn't for the touch of man. A beautiful description and story in your words. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Marie Harrison]

An amazing poem. So true too. This is one of my fav's. It's going into my vault of select poems. Thanks for sharing.

[Closedown]

Freaking awesome! But still, humanity is a horrible thing to it's own end... Makes you think... Renfieldians unite!

[luciddreamer]

this is an awesome write ...
Peace
Robin