Lost Innocence

Tragic circumstances faced by young child..... Unfortunately very common.

If only I knew that feeling of bliss, Of being tucked in every night, with a kiss. My tummy and also my heart feeling full Can you and my daddy make that possible... Tomorrow, I promise I'll try to be good, So I won't get punished, I know that I could. And I'll try not to cry, and I'll try to be strong, Even when Daddy does things that are wrong. But I guess I deserve it, I must be so bad, For making my mommy and daddy so mad, That they have to go out and leave me alone, I am so hungry, wish grandma could phone. Be brave little girl, I wish grandma could say, I'll be there to come and get you some day. And I'll buy you new shoes, and a brand new pink dress, That will make you look like a little Princess. But I know Grandma's gone, and she's not coming back. Why do they die, God, what is a heart attack? Tonight I'll kneel by my bed and I'll pray, That "the lady" won't come and take me away. Mommy, I love you, and I love daddy too. I know you can't help all the things that you do..........Barbz

Reviews

[Rahul Chhabra]

The poem is actually beautiful. It could be improved with the right formatting. The words do resonate within me. It reminds me of my honest childhood.
That is, exactly true mark of a great writer. The one who can write what all feel is the supreme goal of the entire literature.
Good luck. Happy writing. :)

[Donna]

That was excellent! So sad we live in a world like this. Nicely written.

[Gianna Anaya]

The diction was simple which fit perfectly with the thoughts of a young child. Tragic that we live in a world where this occurs but alas your piece was beautiful and innocent. You were right, "unfortunately very common"

[Billy]

Very strong words...I have witnessed at lot...and the most important thing is I know it was never my fault.

So many children blame themselves in some way.

[EKTA]

really beautifully written....

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Very heart felt raw honest true I enjoyed even though sad x

[Valentine]

Just wondering what happened to you? Why no more good writings like this? Valentine

[Robert Haigh]

A heart-wrenching write. You capture the child's way of thinking (under such dire circumstances) perfectly, I would say. The rhythm holds together superbly well throughout. An excellent and deeply touching poem! ~Robert~

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

I love this. Sweet, innocent, agony. Very moving and expressive piece. Great work.

[Chris]

A lot of truth... and memories crowd around.

[wordman]

barbz,i wish this stuff wasn't true.but i know it is,and i would go out of my way to help
any child in this situation.i think god put certain people on earth to help these kids
and i know satan works hard against them.