Raindrops In the Sky

Raindrops fall gently
Playful winds tickle tree branches
All is quiet.
The world is at peace
This beautiful night.
Some stars shine through the mist,
Few cars interrupt the silence.
I lay outside as the rain slows
Dreaming about nothing.
Lazy and calm
The rivers run over rocks
Eternally changing shape
As molecules shift
Racing down the riverbed
Into the ocean far away.
The ocean reflects the stars
The same stars shining through the mist here,
The same stars great grandchildren will see
Many years from now.
Still shining bright
Guiding children at play
And sailors at sea.
A comet shoots by
Illuminating the eternal sky.
Will great grandchildren see
This comet sail?
Lighting up the sky
Playing games with the stars?
Or will there be new ones
Old ones flown away
While the stars watch and dream.
Dream as I do,
Laying outside tonight
Watching the raindrops fall.

Reviews

[Sarah Morgan]

Oh so beautiful and it was like a breath of fresh-air - such a calming piece. I enjoyed reading it and as to your flow of writing I loved that I sort of 'thought-dreamed' this as I was reading it picturing everything you wrote and I thought it flowed beautifully because it was as if you were reading a part of a book and thinking to yourself in this piece so I liked it very well. :) Great write!

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

There is no particular flow to this poem . It's too free-flowing for me to actually understand your point . But other than that it is good . It's more or less like you are just typing sentences and putting them in lines

[harley]

amazing. i absolutely felt as if i were there with u. i could see what u saw and i could feel what u felt. i loved it

[Kiari Sabon]

i love it makes me think of the times i sit in my fav tree and watch the moon and stars its realy good

[Helpless]

Dream as I do,
Laying outside tonight
Watching the raindrops fall.

such a gorgeous ending to an excellent poem- i really did enjoy this

[Dark Angel ~]

You're such a talented poet! I wish I could do something like this. :)

[Althelia Marie Caine]

This is beautiful writing. :)