Red and Gold

I won an award from a Holocaust remembrance society for this one

Dawn breaks
Red and gold
Birds sing
Crickets chirp
Everything seems fine on the surface
But bombs detonate in the distance
As smoke rises from the dry forests
Sparks burn up entire fields
Leaving people to starve
While those who set bombs laugh
Yet we remain ignorant of the torture
Of the pain of the suffering
Deaf to their screams
What has the world come to
No one seems to care about others
As long as they’re alive to witness
The next red and gold sunrise 

Reviews

[Emily]

I love the imagery in this one, "as long as they're alive to witness the next red and gold sunrise" "As smoke rises from dry forests". Having said that, there are a few lines where you drift into the abstract a little bit, which I think would be more powerful if you put in some more imagery. For example, instead of "Everything seems fine on the surface," try something like, "the ocean waters appear calm and still" That way, you get your same message across, but you put it into an image instead of an abstract line, Good work, overall. I'm just trying to help you make it even better. :)

[TheElfPrincess]

Wow, this is truly beautiful. Well written.

[Judy Ponceby]

It seems so callus and yet seems no other way to have dealt with such horrors. Very well written. Thank you for sharing.