Solo Flight

inspired by Bhavana

In our hearts the longing stays
A soul's cry for better days.
When love was in the palm of our hands
Readily we faced our lives' demands.

Things don't last the way we want them to be

Tides change as waves ebb into the sea.
And so, on these roads of dirt and stone

Bravely we must trudge our lifelong path alone.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this piece, and it's good rhymes. I only have one suggestion, to consider reworking the line
"Things don't last the way we want them to be" - it is a little clumsy somehow
Things don't turn out how we want them to be?
Things don't become what we want them to be?
Things don't become what we imagine them to be?
There are lots of possibilities that might work better, but as always, poetic license prevails.

[Rachelle]

You read my mind, KL. I felt the line was awkward, too. Last minute addition to what was originally a comment to another writer on her work. I will have to mull over which one now….Thank you, KL!

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem. That's usually the way it goes when we get focused on one line.

[Sami Khalil]

A marvelous poem where the narrator's soul cries for justice and equality on the lone roads of stone and dirt. Excellent...:).........

[Rachelle]

Shukran, Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

Shukran laki kaman. Thank you too...:)...............

[Rachelle]

Bu keqi! Don't mention it.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thanks

[Rachelle]

xie xie! Thanks!

[Sami Khalil]

Multi-lingual...:)..............

[melissa]

This is a great poem keep up the great work and keep them coming

[Rachelle]

Thank you!

[melissa]

You're welcome

[A. Amos]

Love the last line, powerful!

[Rachelle]

Only the truth. We all have to do it alone.
Thank you, A. Amos!

[Hafiz Mohammad Yasir]

Very well done. You have shown that you don't need to be a special person to write. This ability is like a wick. You only need a spark. Lovely this one

[Rachelle]

Thank you, Hafiz!

[Raymond Federle]

The many faceted motion of change. The only constant in life. Very well done here! :)

[Rachelle]

Thank you, Raymond!

[New Theory]

This comes from a very very deep place in your heart and this makes for perfection, you once had said that you are not as much romantic, but this poem just negates that statement. You are more closer to being a romantic than being a scientist and this poem proves it.

OK you can start arming yourself with broomsticks and chase me and hit me on my head :P

[Rachelle]

My upbringing prevents me from reacting violently. I will just place a mild hex on you for an hour.

[New Theory]

Hex dont wor... Ouch, I think I pulled a muscle... :P....

[Rachelle]

:P ……….. ………...

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is so lovely.The only constant in life is that it is everchanging. What we are and have today is not promised tomorrow.

[Rachelle]

Thank you, Vidya!

[Raj]

Really a good poem. Masterpiece.

[Rachelle]

Thank you, Raj!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

life's demands can come in between a relationship, as can bad timing...and thus we end up once again trudging through life alone until we find better days and another to let into our heart.

bittersweet poem, but so perfectly constructed, just enough words...

[Rachelle]

Thank you, sir!