Thoughts would end but the infinity wont...
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I sauntered by,
envisaging to descry the tryst of Time and Infinity, But the fact engulfed my envisions, i acquired that it was of sheer inanity. The scant ZERO expounded infinity as i ambled along, I ceased, knowing the Infinity will shrivel the hands of clock, With Mankind,even the Time would eventually knell its last dong. Furthermore,Into the realm of deep aqua, i exhumed the ground, coveting for the cessation, As I went along,
i glimpsed the same somber space, Infinity smote on my Cerebration, I could not prophesy the Infinity which was Unleashed and unbound, I transpired,
the journey towards infinity was more perpetual and profound.
The tryst of Time and Infinity. Such a interesting topic to ponder upon. I like the places you took me in your poem. Would be cool if we knew the future. I believe we need to learn from the past to make less error. New journeys can lead us on a twisting ride. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote
Always a great topic to think on... lately I have been talking about time a lot and I keep wanting to turn it into a poem. I'm glad you did! This is wonderful.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Haha Its an interesting tpoic to ponder upon and write down ;) Thank you again dear :)
An interesting write - your poems make me think (a good thing) because you organize your thoughts in a unique way. This line spoke to me: "I exhumed the ground, coveting for the cessation..." Digging up Time, wishing for the end... Well done
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Yeah, you got its theme perfectly :) Thank you for your sweet review and rating too :)
I like the piece overall and I really like the concept and underlying meanings and thoughts it provokes.
I'm not a fan of repeated words without real purpose in writings. And you have quite a few here. I noticed this in some other pieces of yours. In those they work because they feel right in the overall confusion you are conveying. In this one, I think a few good synonyms would have helped.
But, this is me. :)
Again, overall it is a good piece. :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you for great suggestion madam,will work upon it to make it perfect :) God Bless you! :)
No please ,don't say that.. You are such a nice person .. :)
11 Years Ago
Aww thank you. I have my moments. :)
It has been nice meeting you, Sir and I have enjoyed read.. read moreAww thank you. I have my moments. :)
It has been nice meeting you, Sir and I have enjoyed reading your work. :)
11 Years Ago
Me too glad to meet you here .. :) And enjoyed your every review .. :)
wow, this was an interesting read! I loved it. Well written and i love your descriptions! It was like also going on a journey while reading this! ha ha. =D
This is a great piece. You sent me to the dictionary! not many people do that. I spotted a few grammatical errors in there though.
"Envisions" should just be "Visions" (3)
"acquire" should be , well any other word but acquire is out of place there. try "perceived" (4)
"I ceased knowing the infinity" should be " I ceased knowing THAT infinity" (6)
"I could not prophesy the infinity" should be "I could not prophesy OF the infinity"
apart from that. This is an excellent piece. really philosophical really. Great job
Hi,I always find time to sacrifice my interest towards poetry.I feel intrigued to pen down about different lives,fictitious thoughts, and something more new about the things that hardly drop by to our.. more..