The Setting Sun

I watched the sun

on lovers peak

where we once were

and wouldn't speak

I watched the moon

above the stars

silent with

no one in my arms

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

The beginning and end of love realized. Well done and we have to always keep the beginning memory and let the ending one fade.

[Valentine]

Having then losing, I can relate to that. Valentine

[daninstockholm]

lovely work fraught with possibilities, so many ways to interpret this, strong sense of longing, of regret, sadness,, love it!

[andrew mitchell]

I loved this write. Well done! Brilliant! Wow!

[Bear]

Did you mean for the first stanza to rhyme (peak speak) or did it just work out that way? If it was planned then way didn't you keep the rhyme going in the second stanza it is very good. This is a great idea, it would be nice to expand on it and lets us know more about this forlorn couple. In short I liked it but it left me wanting more :~)

[onion demon]

this is SUCH a great poem. It's by far one of the deepest things i've read.