Breakaway

Inside the girl's soul,
Lies incomprehensible pain,
She consistently conceals,
While eyed with disdain

She's been swimming so long,
She's lost under a high tide,
Losing view of the water's surface,
The ocean just too deep as it is wide

She's trying her best,
While losing herself,
Always doing what she can,
Helping everyone else

But either she doesn't do enough,
Or people find her too assistive,
Lashing out, treating others wrong,
Or letting mistakes make her too submissive

Always being questioned,
Always letting herself down,
Thinking what's the point in trying,
When she's pushed to the ground

Her hands and knees in the dirt,
Wondering her own worth,
Questioning everything she knows,
Of this place called earth

Finding a place to sit all alone,
She lets her head take her far away,
Dreaming of a world just for her,
Wishing she could only breakaway

Author's Note

Any criticism is much appreciated, thank you for taking the time to read.

Reviews

[J.E. Rayfloyd]

You feel your not good enough for other people even though you are

[GalaxyGhost]

We all struggle to be our best or what others think of us to be the best of. However, it all comes down to actually appreciating ourselves because if we cannot please everyone but ourselves as we know ourselves better than anybody else.

[Inject Positivity]

Thought provoking and very relatable... When we feel the weight of this world on our shoulders, the feeling of brokenness overcomes our thought, every single moment feels like we are breaking away and the world seems like a hell... Your poem speaks of so many thoughts which a person who is dealing with the pressure of this world can easily relate to...

Very well structured with a nice flow in it... Leaves the reader in deep thoughts...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[LastMonth]

I like it.
I see this as the story of a bird that flew too close to the sun.

It raises a question, or perhaps issues a statement.
Must the mistakes of our past cripple the actions of our future..?

Thank you for the poem.

[Kirsty Woodward]

Some great lines in this. My favourite being,

"She's trying her best,
While losing herself"

The self destruct button is always there just waiting to be pressed.

[WILDERNESS]

Very nice indeed, capturing the sentiments just perfectly ...................... you will only get better.