Broken Inside

I feel like my life is plummeting to the ground,

and I can't even make a sound...

I can't seem to stop from crying,

secretly, I just feel like i'm dying,

I feel so broken inside,

like I really already died,

but somehow I'm just still here,

wanting only to just be yours, my dear,

there is no one who means more to me,

It's like thats the only thing you can't see,

I wish things could just go right,

for more than just a day or night,

If you really knew,

how much I was in love with you,

I don't think things would keep going this way,

the same

day after day... 

Reviews

[Scott Metro]

I think every human can relate to this...thanks for sharing the pain.
Well done...enjoyed it.

Scott

[Yours Truly]

Thank you very much

[Torao]

I know its a lot easier to write with negative emotion, but you definitely have the talent to be able to write irregardless the mood your in. Good write!

[Yours Truly]

Oh thank you so much! :)

[ron]

If only the ones we love could see how we feel. I love this poem, I have feel victem to the same feelings and thoughts. Very nicely written.

[Yours Truly]

Right.. and thank you, I appreciate that.

[ron]

You are most welcome.

[Praveen Patil]

Hey.. Nice poem.. I loved it... Hope you start writing when you are happy even! because we may get some romantic poems!!

[Yours Truly]

Thank you! Lol :)

[Praveen Patil]

Welcome...

[Vidya Bacchus]

Your poem is filled with such emotion .Sometimes you have to let people know how you feel,the knowing can't be any worse than the wondering,Great write

[Yours Truly]

My poems are the only way I really feel like I can get out my emotions.. and yeah true. Thank you

[Vidya Bacchus]

you are welcome

[The Seasonal Girl]

heartfelt emotions, true love sprinkled with pain of being ignored oozes in every word. Hope the one who is causing the pain reads this, so that he never gives that pain again.

take care :)

[Yours Truly]

thank you. you too :)

[Lydia Shutter]

The raw emotion in this is honest and open. The imagery is good and the rhyming flawless. The pain of a romantic relationship breaking up is well expressed. Lydi**

[Yours Truly]

thank you i really appreciate that :)

[lily]

This kind of writing I really enjoy.
I love this... its dark, but it shows so much raw emotion.
Well done :D

[Yours Truly]

thank you :) i can't really write happy stuff lol