The intimacy with War

Make an acquaintance with a soul that is all about dismembering a brutal foe...

You have endorsed the lethal limits,
as you have engendered an abashing so limpid,
Even the "Haydes" would go timid.
After your forbidden annihilation,
My reprisal would get a pacified station.

I beckon war as a tyrannic cursed craft,
But you burnt my soul to make me perched on it's raft.
The ravages of my blistery will mark you as history.
The fella digging your soul won't posit your butchered mystery.

You abashed me, whipped me like a rock....
just because i got a request at your knock..
Believe me, no one can fetter me, get your ribs bracked,
Not even the army backed at your barrack.

I'm infiltrated with an oath,..
That I'll get you attired with an abbadon-ial coat.
The Funnel-flask of your demise has been unleashed...
Count your days as you'll get ceased.

Author's Note

It is just mythical and counterfeit........

Reviews

[dw817]

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I'm - not really sure how to comment to this one, Sushi except to quote one famous man of whom I completely agree with.

"Mankind must put an end to war before war puts an end to mankind." ─ John F. Kennedy

[L.Edward]

The funnel flask of your demise. Mo ha ha ha. Evil like the fruits of the devil! Very clever little vignette. Ferociously unique.

[Baby Ricochet]

Sounds great. Where do I sign up

[sushobhan]

No...You reviewed great....

[redzone]

there is a song by Linton Kwasi Johnson (he's a dub poet/musician) that goes something like: "we gonna smash their brains in, cause there's nothin in dem"... your poem reminded me of this song.... should we say that sushobhan is somewhat "vengeful"??? ;o) I am sure they deserved it though, but I will be careful not to get on your bad side... enjoyed reading your poem, thanks for sharing.. ~~redzone

[sushobhan]

HaHaHa! I'm not vengeful..I've never been.....Thanks for the review.......

[redzone]

you are more than welcome sushobhan, hope you didn't mind my teasing you... I am sure you are not vengeful...

[sushobhan]

Teasing!! Even that falls out like parts of pearls from a necklace when meant it....

[sushobhan]

Sorry i mean when you meant it....

[Kane]

very unique and interesting, I like it

[sushobhan]

Thanks,....Send me your read requests...

[sushobhan]

I mean the continuation of the stories i read, if you have proceeded further or if you have more interesting penning, I'm always there.....

[Kane]

Sure i will do that

[Mercia74]

Interesting take on an aggressive theme, I like it :) Can't say I've read anything like this before, and for that alone you deserve top marks. Or maybe a commendation! Clever rhyming too...

[Frieda P]

Tough read, war is never pretty, like the title, never thought of it that way, I guess there is an intimate relationship that exists, how else could the soul stand such brutality...much food for thought here.

[sushobhan]

I appreciate your benevolent and commiserating {with the guy} approach towards my stuff. Please get me to go through some of your stuff too.

[Sami Khalil]

I like the butchered mystery usage among the unleashed demises. A powerful write...Bravo

[sushobhan]

Thanks man!!!! I bet that you are gonna be a true legend at posterity.....I totally get enthralled by your stuff. Don't forget to send me more read requests.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you kindly...I will...:)