"The last drop of my living"

Just make a small errand with depressing sensation.

"A bounty of overshadowed fluctuations,
 that led to frayed temptations,
 which ultimately meant depression,
 languished me under the melted heart's erosion".

 

Akin to a soul,crushed by crooked grooves,
I questioned my life to be approved.
With the divine silence of heavenly creatures,
i was the vagrant apparition at this spherical miniature.
 

The nature, dripped in commiseration,
tried to ameliorate my way to pretension.
The sunflowers endorsed to make my lips U-curved,
but my dejected mindset got it blurred.
Quite afflicted,I perched myself precincts to a vineyard,
but my tangled emotions cremated me to the graveyard.

With the gleaming "CINQUEDEA" already on my virtue,
Camaraderie of mine want in hell, a requisite curfew.  

Author's Note

Please rate this poem if you liked it.

Reviews

[redzone]

with a home like hell, and then having a curfew, now that is hell!!! I guess temptations can get you into lots of trouble sushobhan, but then not all temptation leads to hell.. some actually lead to liberation.. I particularly liked these lines: "The nature, dripped in commiseration,/tried to ameliorate my way to pretension./The sunflowers endorsed to make my lips U-curved," sunflowers can be very tempting I think... they can change a "mindset"... enjoyable read sushobhan... ~~redzone

[sushobhan]

Thanks Red. You judged it very nicely soul....

[Baby Ricochet]

Some good imagery and kind of depressing.

[sushobhan]

Thanks for laying your awe-inspiring eyes on this work...

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Excellent piece and so very individual it sticks out like a rose in a dessert on here.

[sushobhan]

Oh! i can't exclaim how much evoked was i to hear that poetic imagery that you used to review my stuff. Your beckoning is like a million dollar note for me. Thanks!

[Sami Khalil]

You are unique along with your unique writes...Thank you for sharing...:)

[L.Edward]

"With the divine silence of heavenly creatures, I was the vagrant apparition at this spherical miniature." I particularly loved those two lines. I dug the really unique word usage too. A highly emotive and cleverly wrought number indeed. It didn't feel so depressing to me. More surreal really.

[sushobhan]

Hats off to your feedback. You yourself are such an honor to deal with.

[L.Edward]

Cheers friend. Muchly obliged.

[wordwarrior]

Firstly I don't do ratings simply because I don't quite understand them and would probably give everyone I read 100/100 which isn't helpful!
You've written a clever poem with wonderful metaphor and imagery. Most unique. I enjoyed this one

[sushobhan]

It's so gracious of yours for your heart rejoicing comments. I thank you from the bottom of my soul.

[Ryan]

Very unique style to write this in. I like it when the words don't go directly down the page. Way to be creative and indent the second "paragraph" keep it up!

[sushobhan]

Thanks for your benevolent review.