The face on the mirror

The face on the mirror

A Poem by sushi

Daily i stand in front of the mirror
to see a face in front of me,
which everyday keeps me staring at it...

I see it daily,
still everyday i feel it to be the first time....
Why don't i get familiar to it????
Why does the mind never accepts it to be mine????

My eyes refuses to move away...
The running time never stands as a barrier,
These eyes look into the eyes on the mirror,
some waves rushes from left to right of my head....
A wired feel conquers me...

The waves spreads and slowly moves down
through the neck till the hands....
The fear remains, but my control in me is lost,
these eyes refuse to move away from the eyes on the mirror,
my conscience prays for some one to move me off this mirror
and some one does it every-time, may god bless them...

© 2011 sushi


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The face in the mirror ourselves, sometimes a stranger . Well said.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Imagery is great, and I really really liked how you ended it. Great read :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


I liked your choice of content. The words fit well. There are minor flaws whose correction doesn't require changing your word choice i.e. "accepts = accept", "refuses = refuse", "rushes = rush", "spreads = spread", "moves = move". The poem has a lot to say and you HAVE expressed yourself very well.

Take care,
Chris

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amazingly fantabulous :]

Posted 12 Years Ago


I think we all can relate to this piece - our face and consciousness or state of mind can be contrasts to each other, and that's when we fail to recognise ourselves and we are left confused. I don't like seeing a stranger in the mirror as well, and it leaves me wondering and questioning myself.
I also love the images you have built there. Face-Mirror-Eyes ... While we may not recognise the face we see in the mirror, we can still probe into the eyes and discover our true selves - because eyes never lie... Eyes are the windows of our souls.
A thought-provoking and wise write. Very well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow... so this is how it feels to describe that feeling that I feel. Nicely put into words! Love this last part a lot:
"The fear remains, but my control in me is lost,
these eyes refuse to move away from the eyes on the mirror,
my conscience prays for some one to move me off this mirror
and some one does it every-time, may god bless them... "

Posted 12 Years Ago


Good one..!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Thank you one and al 4 talking ur valuable time to read and review my write...

:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sometimes people cannot recognize themselves and we just realized who we are when somebody tells us..... Great write........

Posted 12 Years Ago


lovely work

Posted 12 Years Ago



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