The Puppet Life

I listen to each word of your's,
have I ever been heard???

You argue to be right,
hurting me, you go right.
I turn speechless at your screams,
like a cat hiding from see.

I lost my smile in the past
where I was innocent and small.
I wish to go back to the start
where last of my smile I lost
I wish to undo those mistake
I wish to go back to start
a life as fresh as breeze
as pleasant as tree
as truly me...

I wish to break free of the strings tied on me
fly high and breath free...
I wish to correct the past
from mistakes, first to last...

You present me with tears
each moment, from long...
restricting from having the same on.
The smiles prove fake on me
(the face has lost its glow)
it fits on me no more.
Still I wear a fake smile,
smiling all the way
at an order I could never restrain.

I wish to break-off           all the nerves
to let, flow-out the         blood of slavery
lean back                          to my chair
and rest                               in peace.

Author's Note

While i was formatting this work, i felt it could be made to give an illusion of a puppet and tried my best on it.

The head, face , the shoulders to the leg is what the para are formatted to make, so only the last para( forming the leg of the puppet has a very large space between the words in a sentence)...

Please give your reviews and ratings....

Reviews

[Sel Whiteley]

Love the format and the poem is brilliant too.

[Karina Anderson]

This is cute :) It really works well together with the format that you placed. I like.

[Nayan]

This is an amazing write Sushi! It so well captures the sentiments of the 'puppet', which most of us have become, while running in the mad race to survive and win!

Really love the picture of a puppet that you have built visually using the words from your poem.

This poem really twines the chords of the heart of those people, whose dreams are different, higher and beautiful than what they are doing/forced to do currently!

[One Metallic Teardrop]

I love this poem. I think the format is fantastic and the words are strong and meaningful.

[Ruth]

Great structure love! Fabulous poem too :) Sometimes we have to get that voice over, not always easy though - this is wonderfully crafted! xx

[Vaidehi]

Nice work with the format and the poem reminds us of the harsh truth of life too : we are all puppets in the drama of life...

[Seshat Nidaba]

I nearly get a touch of feminism in this piece, or am I totally wrong?

"I wish to go back to the start where last of my smile I lost" - I loved this line!

I like freedom poems and I like Sushi, so how could you go wrong I am not sure!

[sid......]

good imagination!

[Lively]

Its very nice. It more likely match the lives and stories of indian women.

[BloodyRabbit]

love the formatting :) great poem... lots of strong imaginative words :) beautiful... thanks for sharing :)