A Salute to TRUE RELATIONS

I now leave my home place

To a new town to make it mine.

I leave back on my way, all

Those memories I shared with you, and

Dedicate my thanks through shining diamonds

From eye, with a hope to reach my place...

On my way, I see things around me

Move past, to signify the future coming.

The strong wind blows against me,to

Stop me with might. The trees move -- to and fro,

To uproot and fall on path.

The clouds spread tears to tell

What it feels and the master-planner --

Hid behind these, stole lights to, not to let me flee...

To each's strom and tears, I placed an end.

Moved on and on, with a hope to reach my place.

I spent all my pen's ink to fill my papers

With stop. One fine day, I woke and read

to stand different to the thought it ment.

To know ' what it ment? ', I turned

Around I saw "all end, all ful-stop

followed" to say "my care continues...."

My search in my journey gave, You to Me

Forever to me, Hope as a shadow following me.

Reviews

[gravitylava]

I really liked this... it felt like a conversion type thing, like you were in a timid crisis and are now more on your way to becoming more spiritually stable. the lyrical quality here is super well done, and the bits of actual speech
(i.e., I woke and read
to stand different to the thought it ment.
To know ' what it ment? ', I turned
Around I saw "all end, all ful-stop
followed" to say "my care continues....")

That was my favorite part.
good job!

[Vaidehi]

Change is difficult.. but you seem to have made poetry out of it. :)

[Audrey Howitt]

I too like the conversational quality to this poem. Although my favorite part was: "The clouds spread tears to tell what it feels" I like the imagery, and the color and feel of this line in particular.

[darkness*star1985]

really great work sushie, very beautiful written.

[Sweets]

Wow. This is wonderful!
I loved the imagery used in here, this poem is so creative.
"My search in my journey gave, You to Me
Forever to me, Hope as a shadow following me."
I loved this stanza, especially the rhymes in the last line!
Great work!

[Ashesh]

this is the feeling when you leave behind glory days and you head forward to the unknown world ..still you crave for those lost moments and try to live in the stains of past. a beautiful poem. thanks for sharing.

[cfix]

"I spent all my pen's ink to fill my papers
With stop. One fine day, I woke and read
to stand different to the thought it ment."

I really enjoyed these lines here.
This is a wonderful write, very nicely expressed feelings.

[sid......]

wow.beautiful.....

[Maggie]

A few spelling errors, but besides I liked it. It sounds very old world and vintage...sort of like a poem from long ago

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

Wow this is fantastic :)