Redemption Reigns

Complex Alliterisen

Redemption REIGNS

Desolate dirt and hopelessly hurt,

Luciferian lies fueling crippling cries.

Trenching truth of yesterday's youth,

disguised deceit and constricting conceit.

Plunder pride in steady stride,

secret sin and wickedness, where-in,

Man lives in a world devoid of God. 

The promised place and glorious grace,

with goodness gaining and redemption reigning.

Sovereign shield and hopelessness healed,

prophets paving and salvation saving.

Perfect peace and sorrow's cease,

Forever faithful and grown grateful,

knowing Abba's love will lead us home.

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

The form of your poem is exacting but a guiding star that should be studied, then patiently practiced
Your view of life and the rise and fall or humanity is compelling, yet, gently empathetic, Susan. Humankind is very much a mix and un-match: for and to me, you have put that subtly throughout. especially inferred here, ' ..with goodness gaining and redemption reigning.

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Emma for the review 😊

[emmajoygreen]

You're very welcome. As someone who finds form very hard to follow through, I so admire what you so finely do, Susan

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

This poem seems to be exploring themes of sin, redemption, and faith. The first stanza describes a world that is "desolate" and "hopelessly hurt," where lies and deceit fuel "crippling cries." The second stanza contrasts this with the "promised place" of "glorious grace" and "redemption reigning," where prophets pave the way for salvation and there is "perfect peace" and an end to sorrow. The final line, "knowing Abba's love will lead us home," suggests a belief in a higher power and a sense of comfort and security that comes from that belief. Overall, this poem seems to be grappling with some of life's big questions and the search for meaning and purpose in a world that can often seem dark and difficult. Thank you for sharing it to the world!

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you for this incredible and very accurate review!!😊

[Matthew Daalling]

Hmm interesting. We definitely haqve talent here..

[Susan 🦋]

Thanks for reviewing!

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness, another structure I know nothing about... I love structure and so I probably will try it some day. Trying to learn all the many forms on my plate as I am still quite new to all this.
Thank you for sharing not just your poem but the exact structure to (try) and follow.

Lisa, another beautiful day here in Spain

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Lisa for the review! Sorry for late reply... I'm just not here much lately :/

[Lisasview]

No problem .. I too am seldom on here… and after a year of Fan Story I stopped that completely…
All my best,
Lisa

[William Michael Reeves]

You are a wealth of form and structure! Inspiration as well. Although the world is as yet not devoid of God, it's getting there. Alliteration happens to be one of my favorite aspects of poetry. I've used it as a form and structure but had never seen a formal poetic form requiring it. Something tells me if I keep reading you I might learn something. Thank you!!!

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Bill for so many reviews! Not devoid yet and hopefully never! Another form you should try...

[William Michael Reeves]

I just happen to have an idea that is looking for a form to be written in. What is the origin of this form? Where did you find it?

[Susan 🦋]

Not sure on the origin ... I can find out. Richard sent it to me.

[Chris Shaw]

In awe of your patience at attempting such complex poetic forms. Well done Susan. Loved the alliteration presented in your stanzas.

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Chris for the sweet review! Patience?? ;) Sometimes...

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Wonderful Complex Alliterisen as well as the topic you chose to write it in. There really are just two kinds of people in this world, regardless of the reasons why. Nicely penned. tyfs

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you for reading!!!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I firmly believe that good overcomes even in the end. In this world, we may not always witness it; but I still believe. This is very well written and a very challenging form.

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Linda Marie for stopping by and reviewing! Yes, at first glance I was quite intimidated by this form. Once you understand the restrictions, it does flow nicely. (I also love formatted poetry) Richard sends me these forms. Some (well most) I have never even heard of. He also knows I love a challenge :-) Now, I have to work on a Crown of Sonnets! Haha which, is why I didn't mind teasing him a little with his flirty post. The man has me writing Welsh forms, Trijans, Alliterisens and now a Crown of Sonnets! :-)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

LOL! Be forewarned. After the Crown of Sonnets comes the Heroic Crown of Sonnets. Buckle up! :)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

And the Heroic Crown of Crowns!

[Susan 🦋]

Omg! He IS trying to kill me 😂

[Relic]

A poem I wish I had written. Excellent job, Sue.

[Susan 🦋]

Aw thank you!! :-)