Because You Believed ...

Shakespearean Sonnet

How painful echos vibrate deep within ...

a quiet desperation, once consumed.

Erstwhile, doubts linger so restless, therein;

emergent hope revives a soul foredoomed.

T'was neither charity nor false pretense,

whose urging motivates views shift in stride.

Devotion shatters past secured defense ...

discerning insights ~ faithful worthy guide.

Now, shan't deny your priceless gifts, bestow;

in humble gratitude these truths, embrace.

A wounded spirit buries dreams below ...

till parting clouds unveil ~ redeeming Grace.

Impassioned visions finally achieved,

heart set ablaze, because you first believed.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

That second verse in your octave was really powerful! True discerning insights for sure! May I take it that 'you' is God? The believer desires that their maker believe in them as well?

I wrote a Sonnet yesterday and found myself doing something more and more ... writing backwards. Writing that last five feet first. Do you ever do that?

[Mk.t.g]

"Impassioned visions finally achieved,
heart set ablaze because you first believed."
Wonderful words, Susan! I greatly admire your commendable and amazing writing styles. You are truly an exceptional poet. Thanks for sharing this writing!
Mk.t.g

[Susan 🦋]

What a great review!! Thank you for the compliments! So pleased you are enjoying my writing… I see you have left several reviews! Thank you ☺️

[Mk.t.g]

My pleasure, Susan!

[Lisasview]

Oh how I love sonnets... The mere mention of them makes my heart flutter...
Your poem is so so lovely dear Susan... Full of rich words that float from the paper...
Lisa, working on my newest poem Canvas of Dream...and hoping to post that one soon.
Lisa, at my computer

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Lisa for another beautiful review! I’ll be sure to check out your new poem 😊

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome
I finally posted Canvas of Dreams
Lisa

[duff]

So many smooth and smart lines to choose from.

"a quiet desperation, once consumed"

I like that. A pen full of wisdom. A pleasure.

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Duff! I appreciate the kind words!😊💐

[duff]

You're very welcome

[K writes]

Simply Outstanding, So beautiful. I found this touching as well. You have a wonderful talent

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Kayley for yet again, another fabulous review!! Ya making my night this evening!

[barleygirl]

I think of my writing as "simple & country-like" but some find it mind-boggling becuz I use complex language. This poem helps me imagine how others might feel, reading me, becuz this isn't written in a style of language that is easy for me to follow. It feels pretty complex & cerebral, even tho your words technically convey a clear storyline with a lesson. I've always been intimidated by sonnets becuz people who write them often use elevated language. It's a full rich world of writing that I'm just not part of, but I can appreciate the care you put into making this precise & measured (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Susan 🦋]

You shouldn't be intimidated at all...God Lord if I can write one..anyone can. I just happen to enjoy very structured poetry...and for the wording? I keep a list of words that catch my attention.. :-) Im not sure I understand "simple& country-like"... I just think we all have our unique styles. I like that :-)

[Robert Trakofler]

a splendid word salad written in a lulling rhythm sonnet song that graces the reader as much the writer such a sincerity bled into these lines it is hard not to feel them

[Susan 🦋]

Apologies! I missed this review!! Thank you for reading and leaving me this wonderful review!

[Leo]

Great rhyme and superb choice of words .. I enjoy most poems that use proper sonnets and ones that rhyme and yours definitely did it for me as there was a nice melodic effect to it .. blessings

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Leo! I appreciate your kind words!

[R.E. Ray]

Susan, I applaud on you what is a rare achievement, a technically correct sonnet with rich and poetic content. So often one or the other is lost. Your words and verses flow so smoothly we reach the end without knowing it's near.

I love the sincerity and humility in this poem, and the hope expressed throughout. It's faith that carries us through life and love, and that's what you've masterfully captured here.

[Susan 🦋]

What a beautiful review, your words are getting to me... ( crying) lol I do that a lot, no worries. Heck, I think the review is better than the poem! Thank you for reading and thank you for such warm words this moring.

[R.E. Ray]

You're welcome, Susan. A pleasure to read this morning.

[andrew mitchell]

Gifted are those who capture a sonnet well like you have, Very nice to read such flow!

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Andrew for the nice words this morning! Much appreciated :-))