Midnight Love's Foray

 

Come love, take my hand tonight, 

hold me now ’til morn's first light … 

soothes our weary day ~ love’s fragrant bouquet.  

 

Mated lips quench growing thirsts,  

interludes sweetly immersed … 

joined rhythmic ballet ~ stroking cares away.  

 

Sheer oneness in utter bliss, 

we can't join closer than this ...   

whispered breaths portray, sighs urge thighs a’splay.  

 

Heavenly union ~ we’re one; 

in comparing us, there’s none. 

Shun all gainsay … true love’s ne'er passé. 

 

Velvet touch, traced hinder-most,  

each lush sensation’s engrossed ...  

warm passions gain sway ~ midnight love’s foray

Author's Note

Ricalai (Rik-uh-lay) An original form created by Richard W. Jenkins. Thank you Richard for teaching me this wonderful poetic form and allowing me to give it a try. :-) Thank you for all the encouragement and continued support. Thank you for being you!

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is sensual without being blunt...it whispers strongly of passion...and lets us imagine.
and more than just about the physical act, this is about a closeness that only comes when there is a real emotional and mental attachment as well.
two bodies coming together, but also two minds, two hearts.
beautiful...and i see the influence of the old poets...most definitely.
j.

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you for reading and the thoughtful review! I love expressing a feeling...

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The entwining of mutual attentions encapsulated within eloquent prose and wordplay - just exquisite to read and soak up the ambiance - got the ahhhhh factor! :-)

[Susan 🦋]

:-)) What a sweet review!! Thank you so much!

[Russell Pennwright]

I love how the 1st and 4th verse rhyme and the 2nd, 3rd, and 5th verses rhyme with each other. With 5 verses, it has a song-like quality to it.

[Susan 🦋]

Well, thank you very much for reading and for the review! I do appreciate you taking the time to do so...if you are interested, check out my Author Notes...maybe give it a try! :-)

[Ghost]

Wow what a way do describe making love with a lover... This was beautiful write thanks for sharing

[Susan 🦋]

:-) thanks for reading!! I appreciate the review! thanks again..

[Richard McLin]

It does have a great form, and it’s style, flow, and beauty are translucent. Great job.
-Richard

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you Richard!

[wordman]

a beautiful poem of passion and love

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you! I appreciate the review! :-)

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Tate Morgan]

I find this enchantingly sweet

[Susan 🦋]

Hi Tate! Thanks for the review! Hope all is well with you :-)

[Tate Morgan]

All is fine thank you Just trying to find my balance this morning need more coffee

[Susan 🦋]

lol I know the feeling! good luck

[Tate Morgan]

working on it sent you something

[emmajoy]

What is it about hands.. that picture is.. a monument to photography. It lingers as eyes travel your words.. in Picalai.. (that word trickles off the tongue!). ' .. Velvet touch, traced hinder-most, each lush sensation’s engrossed ... '

How thought provoking is that. Beautiful form, lovely words.

Hope my words mean just a little something to you... one can only hope to achieve some contact or another!

[Susan 🦋]

OMGOODNESS! I somehow missed this wonderful review!!! Thank you so very much!..

[emmajoy]

You're welcome!

[Pete]

beautiful and lovely. elegant and deep. great job.

[Susan 🦋]

Hi Pete, thanks for reading and for the review! I do appreciate it! :-)

[Chris]

You followed the style and the words held me paused.

[Susan 🦋]

:-) Thank you! Love this review too! :-)

[Chris]

You're welcome.