Summer's Child

Short little Summer time poem..

This Summer's child,
locks blowing wild,
waits nature's soft caress...
Sand squishing toes,
cool sprinkling hose,
pink flowered morning dress.

Red rosy cheeks,
sweet giggly squeaks...
hence, sailing wishful dreams.
Hands clasping tight,
fire twinkling light,
lush melting cocoa creams.

True secret spot,
now Camelot
Of playtime's to enchant...
clover-leafed crown,
patched, quilted gown,
whilst pond'ring gems to grant.

Nut buttered lips,
licked fingertips,
a threat'ning Bumble sting!
Branched climbing-trees,
bruised tender knees,
on flying wooden swing.

Oh take me back
when worries lack,
to Summer's long ago...
Each granted day's,
unique arrays...
my season's ~ all aglow.

Author's Note

Doubledown Style 2, Fours 'n Sixes, or Quickie
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins

Thank you Richard for your continued support, encouragement and edits!

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Oh how I so love this form and it works so perfectly for you very sweet poem. Your choice of the image and the background in pink really is so perfect as well,
Lisa

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhhhhhhh my ... what a delightful senses packed memories inspired poem .. your "Summer's Child" endears her to me .. tho my own boyhood play was less froofy ;) still i relate to the innocence and freedom .. the tree climbing of course stood out for me and the swings .. such adventure! beautifully done .. gentle flow and rhyme .. V3 seems somewhat of a turn yet it isn't .. but it really stands out for me .. the reference to Camelot i think .. really wraps the magical in an instant .. a pleasure to read and experience for me! who would dare think to change a thing :))
E.

[Susan 🦋]

Aw, thank you for taking the time to read this! Yes, my childhood was a bit different, but I tried to make my own children's very magical. :-) Childhood should be that way...thank you again.

[Pete]

makes me long for the carefree, innocent summers of my childhood. comforting write. nice flow - both wording and that swing ...

[Fabian G. Franklin]

The feel of the poem seems antiquated and nostalgic; it reads like something written before the turn of the twentieth century. Many of my favorite writers are from that era including Emily Dickinson, Jack London, O'Henry, Mark Twain, Poe, Charles Dickens and others. The phraseology lends itself well to the nostalgic atmosphere of the piece. And the artwork is complementary to the poem.

[Susan 🦋]

This is such an exceptional review. Thank you very much. :-)

[Misterr Remeat]

Wow! I really like this one! Takes me right back to my childhood and simpler times. Good Job

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you for reading and for the review! I do appreciate you taking the time to do so :-)

[Gee]

Oh to be a child again, carefree, time told by the rumblings of an empty tummy. The rhyme and flow of this are bang on. Hats off to you Susan

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you! Wonderful review making me smile! :-))

[Gee]

My pleasure.
Even though I'm in my 50's if I smile around my mother she still belts my back expecting me to burp !!!

[Susan 🦋]

haha it sounds like you have a wonderful childhood. Nice.

[Gee]

Colourful, foster homes and kids homes whenever mum got ill or needed respite care. Plenty of stories..

[Susan 🦋]

:-/ I can relate.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this took me back in years carefree

[Susan 🦋]

Yep :-)..wonderful.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Yes those were the days lol no bills

[Susan 🦋]

:-) for sure!

[Chris]

Words at play... Were these written with the picture behind your eyes or in front of them?

[Susan 🦋]

All in my mind's eye...as this does NOT resemble my childhood.But, I can see this in my imagination ..where childhood is a magical time...filled with lots of love and simple joys.

[Susan 🦋]

LOL typo! Bumble sting!... not bubble

[William Liston]

Lovely Susan, with a fun, peaceful visual presentation to match : )
I love how this poem zooms in on specific details and in doing so retains uniqueness along with a playful, lighthearted vibe. Every line was like a little vignette of perfection. My favorite stanza had to be the fourth one (Nut buttered lips / licked fingertips ...) I love how it captured the beautiful little moments one wouldn't typically think of. One wouldn't describe "bruised tender knees" as anything pleasing, but the way you've stated it sounds so playful and enjoyable.
As always, your rhymes, punctuation, and meter are on-point!
Thank you for sharing your talents with us : )

- William Liston

[Susan 🦋]

OH you! good catch...yes, i thought that too!! but was hoping nobody would catch that!!..BUT if ya a boy!! well then all those bumps and bruises are cool! hehhe Thanks for the great review!!!