Ocean of Dreams

Fives 'n Eights A form created by Richard W. Jenkins :-)

We waltz upon waves
where no one else braves,
silver moon-drops ease dueling fears.
Sojourn distant shores,
wind urging implores
our two souls entwine through the years.

Our magical craft
adrift in love's draft,
ocean secrets casting their spell ...
in fantasies' realm,
pure pleasure must whelm,
where unhindered, sweet desires dwell.

Moon's midnight burlesque,
exquisite finesse
becomes sensual, sheer delight.
Two fervent hands grasp,
foam whitecaps thrash,
merging lovertines 'neath starlight.

Kaleidoscope eyes,
elated soul cries,
stirring wanton, warm rising tide.
Suspended in time,
sweet mem'ries sublime
let our swelling hot waves subside.

Seafaring due course,
forgotten remorse,
from cosmos to Neptune's abyss.
Escaping tight bind,
enthralling hearts find
two lovers relaxed, reminisce.

Author's Note

Doubledown Style 3 or Fives 'n Eights
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 4 May 1987
Any number of 6-line verses about anything:
Align left or center.
Syllable count per verse:
5/5/8/5/5/8
Rhyme scheme:
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Etc..

Reviews

[emmajoy]

' Kaleidoscope eyes, - elated soul cries, - stirring wanton, warm rising tide. - Suspended in time, -
sweet mem'ries sublime - let our swelling hot waves subside. ' How beautiful is that: smooth as silk, eloquent, passionate.

'Can't even cope with free verse so you already know how much I admire the way you always produce the absolute when you write within a specific form! Yet again you've converted words into a wonderfully cohesive language. 'Fulsome' it might seem, but i've nowt but admiration and - just a little envy, Susan! :)

[Susan 🦋]

Emma you are such a sweetheart! Thank you for this lovely review! I do appreciate your very kind words!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You do form well and use great skill to place your own constructs within that mould. Thus producing some beautiful classic poetry that encapsualtes romance and even has a sensual mist around it. LOVE the painting!

[Susan 🦋]

It's a stunning painting! I knew it would be a perfect fit. Yes, I love formatted poetry... Thanks for the review and kind words. :-)

[Richard🖌]

Huge 'CONGRATULATIONS!" on your 1st Place Win 🎖 in the "Dreams" poem contest, Our Fine Poetess.

What is truly amazing to me, Dear Susan,
Is how I missed reading and reviewing this gorgeous, perfectly-written, and wondrously displayed piece of sheer romantic bliss, in flowing, heart-glowing, maritime metaphors.
This is intriguingly original and creative, in a one-of-a-kind scenario that sets the soul a'sail on a journey to its perfect mate.
And, all is excellently rendered in my own Fives 'n Eights form … such an honor you've bestowed upon a hopeful olde bard. 😌
Thank you most gratefully and warmly for sharing yourself and your captivating skills with us in such a generously enthralling way, and I love your picture choice, too.

Bless you ever-so warmly and sincerely, Susan ⁓ Richard 🎶 🌺 🎶

[Susan 🦋]

Hi Richard, gosh this was written some time ago...it was one of my first pieces that I realized your original poetic forms and my poetry were meant for each other! Ocean of Dreams is special to me. I am pleased you like it :-) Apologies for failing to recognize you in the notes...I simply forgot. I will correct that today. Thanks for reading and leaving me such a sweet review to start my day. :-)

[Richard🖌]

Always, Susan,
It is a pleasure to partake of your breathtaking poetry … you are quite special. 🌻

[Misterr Remeat]

Very descriptive. I was able to visualize throughout the poem. A lovely place

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you very much! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review! have a wonderful day :-)

[Ana B.]

Beautiful, smooth and graceful write dear author :) You painted a very serene and relaxing image. Lovely

[Susan 🦋]

awe thank you so much for reading and the review!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Solid flow and poetically graceful throughout. The journey from beginning to end carries the reader along very eloquently. Well done - excellent piece!

[Susan 🦋]

Thank you so much for this review! I do appreciate you taking the time to review..glad you enjoyed.