Done For

For just that moment, I was strong enough

And then, in a flash, I was weaker than ever

You cut out my heart and watched me bleed

My hatred for you brings me to my knees

Yet you keep stabbing me, blow after blow

And I'm still here, letting you win again and again

I can't do this, can't bear your hands that steal

And I can't forget the memories, the ones that kill

But you won't leave me, you'll haunt me till the end

And all I ever thought you were, was a friend

But then I realized the sick monster within

And I knew, I knew, I was done for then.

Author's Note

what are your thoughts?

Reviews

[DrD]

I found the rhyming pattern a bit confusing but the emotion certainly is evident. In reading this I could only hope it's fiction. Each time I had some reservation about word selection, you would follow it with a thought that dissolved the problem. An interesting read that forces a second read to appreciate its message.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Sometimes people use our love aginst us. That is pure egocentric evil. Yet we hope they will be infused by our love. When they refuse, it is a choice they have made. Some people, we can only love from afar.
This is a very good release of the pent resentment. I hope it helps you stand tall in the face of adversity. It inspires me in that direction.

[Siren]

i am glad that i was able to inspire you. thank you for reading!

[WingsToFly]

nice poem

[Phillitup]

strong...confident, but harsh....all in all, beautiful

[AYVID N]

You must know my ex too. Very strong expression here. I loved it. Wish I could mail this to him! :)

[quinfinn]

did you date my ex? but seriously....this is intensely emotional and full of the heartache and rage of a love undermined by the last person who should have. this is about betrayal and indifference to feelings in the worst way. i felt every last morsel of this write, right down into the very fibre of my being. well done, poet!!!

[Chidoriflower]

Awesome.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the honest and direct thoughts in the poem. Sometime we must tell the truth and escape the person. I like the flow of thoughts and the strong ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sid]

Wow, a really great piece, the pain, the suffering are so vividly described; despite being a short poem it has so much emotion in it and your word choice is spot on. I enjoyed this a lot...great write!

[Salar Majak]

AWWWWWWWWW this is absolutly AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!
(You cut out my heart and watched me bleed

My hatred for you brings me to my knees)
I really wanted to quote some other lines but then i realizes i'dbe quoting the whole poem!!!!! i loveee this one great job

[Siren]

thank you so much for your enthusiastic review! i appreciate it!