Eyes

this is about all you ladies out there who have beautiful eyes :)

Eyes of blue

Oceans full of waves,

mystery,

and beauty.

these eyes are amazing oceans.

Eyes of green

beautiful emeralds

shining so brightly

pulling me in.

these eyes are precious emeralds.

Eyes of brown

enthralling circles of chocolate

they make me want to be with you forever

staring into your soul.

these eyes are sweet chocolate.

Author's Note

just wrote this i had the words in my mind please review with constructive criticism

Reviews

[Tsubasa-chan]

cool ^^

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Such a nice write and enjoyable

[Corrupthoughts]

Very nice, I like what you are trying to do and I can see the potential for great description. But, forgive me for saying this, parts are cliche. Comparing blue eyes to oceans and green eyes to emeralds is kind of over done. Find other options, I once compared my boyfriends blue eyes to the way ice looks over a lake when you stare straight down at it. Expand your creativity and avoid those tired and true phrases.

[Kala Benfield]

Very flowing, i liked it alot. I like how you used color and imaginative writing.. i could see the eyes in visual.
nice piece