Magic Act

Love from another is often taken for granted and only noticed when gone

This damned emotion,
is something new.
Something terrible,
but something true.
Unexperienced,
can't think of a word.
Nothings like this,
feeling absurd.
Words cutting deep,
into my skin.
Sharper than knives,
not relfection of sin.
Am I really worth nothing?
Could you really care less?
After long reflection,
the final confess.
I tried to hang on,
hoped you were still there.
To take care of my needs,
with wisdom to share.
Now your like glass,
I see what you hide.
But nowhere is left,
to cry and confide.
So I'll listen to you,
you want me gone?
It will happen for sure,
like coming of dawn...
I'll pull a Houdini,
and just disappear,
Right when you miss me,
I'll no longer be near.

Reviews

[Voice11]

Very nice. Again you do wonders with rhyming. This is very explianitory.

[Free Writer]

Your poetry is very deep and dark, it's also very sad, but I feel confident that the person will be able to heal and move on so I don't feel so bad at the end. I love this piece, and I understand in some way how this person is feeling. Great work! :)

[Richard Held]

I enjoy your work. To-the-point - no overuse of words here. Bravo. Write on, Richard www.RadicalEssays.com.

[Lizanne]

Good flow and rthymn. Love lost and the punishment rendered by pulling a Houdini disappearing into thin air and at that moment they will once again want, but not be able to find you. You did a good job on this.

[Vincent]

short stanzas.
they give the bare minimum, but they usually elicit the most vivid emotions.
good writing, great phrases, but i feel the work as a whole is stunted due to vocabulary selection.
good job!