Deaths Door

I took two pills, and then without hesitation took another two. I couldn't back down after all the planning I put into this. I wrote all the letters, sent them, set the date, the place, the time, and picked the pills.
Two more slid down my throat with only a swish of water to help. The rhythm stopped when the bottle had no more to give.
I climbed in bed wrapping myself in its blankets for the last time and turned on the tv.
It seemed like I was lying there forever when everything started to go in slow motion and my heart started a hard pound letting me hear loud and clear its final performance for me. I couldn't move and suddenly my lungs would no longer try to supply me with air.
When death came it came knocking hard and soon its dark hand opened the door i had the audacity unlock and leave wide open, and it took me.

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A bright light jostled me awake and the ekg besides be made my heart drop.
I was alive.
I heard a slow clap and standing at the foot of my bed was a man that looked like he was dipped in black ink. His eyes were anything but kind. People did us a favor when they gave Death a cloak to hide behind.
"Ever wonder where people who commit suicide go?" his voice was deep and had a dance.

Author's Note

ignore all grammar please! Starting a project and want opinions on what i have so far. Please and thankyou
ALL comments and thoughts are VERY MUCH appreciated

Reviews

[Yeng Xiong]

Pretty cool, I was able to image this and be in the characters position. It was a pretty nice ending that when the character died he or she became alive, as a spirit, just to see Death coming to take them away.

[Teal G]

Thankyou very much!! You boosted my confidence and i actually somehow didn't think of the spirit idea which is perfect for the story line i'm slowly putting together. Thanks again :)