Storm Of Arts

My first poem. I stole the picture from Venus, check her out. shes an amazing poet. Be a crtitic.

Storm of Arts

The way I see you, upside down

Drawn with pastels, so dark, so dense.

All around, the colors blend.

Sky meets ocean, land meets air.

Mixed till perfection, can’t be recognized.

Shades of blue and yellow shine through,

The desolate clouds.

Clouds disperse and rain stops.

The sun is here, the storm is gone.

 

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[wicked.wanderer]

It's simple, but I like it.
"The desolate clouds."
Favorite line, although the imagery pulled me in first.
Your writing style seems to be a bit rough and choppy - have you experimented with other formats?
I can't presume to know everything about your style after having read only a couple of your works, but it looks to be pretty traditional, and I think you'd actually like some crazier formats based on aesthetics and flow.
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