Devoid

Fallen or deflated
metaphors do not describe
the sense of helplessness
she feels when she thinks about them.

It's crumbling like a house of cards.
It's falling at the speed of a punctured balloon.

And while in the future
she might find someone
who will reintroduce her
to that feeling which he so effortlessly
brought and kept
She knew there are names and faces
that change everything
like cyclones in a field,
that leaves us with scars,
beautiful, memorable.

And we are never the same since.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of words in this poem. Create thoughts in the strong statements in this poem.
"And while in the future
she might find someone
who will reintroduce her
to that feeling which he so effortlessly
brought and kept"
No weakness in this outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[VannahBanana]

This is really deep; allows people to think about this in different ways.
I like your word techniques.
Maybe give hints of what's happening so we can think more about the meaning?
I like it as it is anyway.
Really, really good work(:

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like cyclones in a field,
that leaves us with scars,
beautiful, memorable.

These lines are quite remarkable, I like the feel of this write,
It's deep & powerful. Very well written.