Definitely a good poem here. This really speaks of a strong connection even through a separation. I know how this feels, entirely too well. Having to keep one of us at home means that my wife and I have to travel separately to visit friends and family, and I always feel a bit lost without my partner. I don't think it could have been described better. Thanks for the RR, SuperChick62! I really enjoyed this one.
I remember that Christmas. when we awoke in the morning it snowed. The trees heavy with it. And I kissed you as you looked out the window taking it all in. And I have kissed you every morning since.
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And may you do so every morning and afternoon and evening and night forever more.
I'm not really sure about what to feel right now, but it seems like this piece reminds me of someone. Anyway, this writing is clear and simple. Not wordy yet it speaks a deep emotion. Perfect. Just what I want to read. I hope to read more of your writings like this.
Definitely a good poem here. This really speaks of a strong connection even through a separation. I know how this feels, entirely too well. Having to keep one of us at home means that my wife and I have to travel separately to visit friends and family, and I always feel a bit lost without my partner. I don't think it could have been described better. Thanks for the RR, SuperChick62! I really enjoyed this one.
pour it out SC...visions erupting into reality
poignant, sincere and heartfelt...from beginning to end
your writes seem to take on that lyrical and rhythmic flow...I do enjoy them so...
parting is so very hard to do...we try to see all the positives but are realistic and pragmatic enough to know that it's time to turn the page....
A very thoughtful, honest write Super.
Much enjoyed
allen
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Exactly. And sometimes when you turn the page, it gets better. We turned that page of our chapter an.. read moreExactly. And sometimes when you turn the page, it gets better. We turned that page of our chapter and have been together 3 years now. :)
we''ve been together for forty...and it's not only time to turn the page, but to end the book. .. read morewe''ve been together for forty...and it's not only time to turn the page, but to end the book.
Difficult to do as you might imagine, but there are just so many chapters in a book.
allen
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Are we still talking about my poem? This poem is about a time in my past, three years ago when I met.. read moreAre we still talking about my poem? This poem is about a time in my past, three years ago when I met my husband and we started off apart and we're together now. It was a physical separation not a break up.
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I thought I was...but if not...you just found out something about me
Have a great weekend Supe.. read moreI thought I was...but if not...you just found out something about me
Have a great weekend Superchick
allen
While reading I pictured 2 people who haven't seen each other in a long time. The spent the night together. Not sure what they will do next. One person leaves while the others stays to wonder if he/she will come back. Apparently the person returns and everything great since the poem ends "Merry Christmas...Good Morning Beautiful.
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They had to separate but stayed together. Thanks for the comment. :)
A well constructed monologue depicted in a poem. From morning to morning, forming a circle of thoughts.....I liked the way, you planned the emotions. You could frame a stage in my mind where a woman is waiting for someone special on a Christmas eve. Thanks a lot for sharing this poem...
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Exactly. That's the image I had when I wrote this poem. Got it spot on.
I really like this poem. It has so many emotions all in a short poem. While reading this I couldn't help but think of my own personal experiences in relationships. That feeling of missing someone and wondering if they missed you as well.
There was a part of your poem that really stood out to me...
"It’s been so long
I don’t know what to do next
I want to cry when I wake up in the morning
I want to know what to do next
I want to know"
I am not exactly sure what you were thinking when you wrote this. But when I read it I thought of an experience I had with my now ex-boyfriend. I didn't know what to do and that was all I wanted to know...what to do next...
A job well done on this poem! :) I hope to read more in the future :)
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That's pretty close. We were in a troubled relationship, but it was long distance for four months, t.. read moreThat's pretty close. We were in a troubled relationship, but it was long distance for four months, that's what this poem is about. The separation. So, yeah, pretty accurate.
The name: I would normally put my name instead, but I chose this to honor my previous community, Original Poetry. This was my account name and I was called "super." ~ "Good luck, old chum, good health.. more..