Lost

I find myself stuck in a place I do not know.My eyes scanned the surroundings searching for something familiar. I am alone me my self and I are the only ones here.As I walk through this unfamiliar territory I soon find my self face to face with something i can not enplane. It looks at me and I look at it. We mimic each others movement and I find out it is lost too. I allowed it to come with me and now I have company but soon it all ends. We take a wrong turn and the ground collapse under my feet. I fall but the thing grabs my hand. As i dangle there and nothing but darkness under me. I look up at the thing that was lost like me. I held on for my life but one by one each finger slip and i went tumbling down in to a dark abyss...

Reviews

[Vanity]

Well, there are a number of issues. First, poems aren't generally written in paragraph form. You have too many spelling mistakes to point out as well. You do not use correct grammar and punctuation, even for the simplest things like capitalizing "I".
But surprisingly enough I like the story and content of this poem.

[Libby McKeown]

This work is interesting in scope and structure. The potential for some great art is here, but it does need a little work. Honestly, your grammar is terrible! Grammatical errors, especially the glaring ones here, detract greatly from your poem. The plot is solid, but I think the revelation that the one who is lost is "me" is anticlimatic. I think that perhaps on this point it should be more vague, or somehow more open to interpretation. A mere suggestion. Thanks for sharing!

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

thanks guys i will go and fix it though..and i really don't know what it was it was a dream i had and i never saw it clearly.

[Sofia N]

I love how you told the story in just one paragraph, i love the descriptiveness and the flow of it. I recommend to check you grammar, otherwise, good job :)

[Not A Writer]

I recommend you use stanzas format and the spelling is a bit off in most places. However, what was that thing by the way?