Dream big

this is a poem describing me.

My heart breaks but i still keep moving foreword. My eyes weep but i still keep moving foreword. I witness deaths right in front of me but yet i keep moving foreword. I must keep moving foreword put this all behind me. I must forget all of it i must keep dreaming for my goes i must keep this all behind me...I must.

Reviews

I actually like the format. It's prose poetry. My only suggestion is to play with the wording to see if you can make the meaning less obvious. Also, unless this was intentional, punctuation and capitalization need adjusting.

This has a good foundation. Keep building :)

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

thanks all and i will do that... :)

[Sofia N]

I love your words. very real and powerful ; keep writing,and I agree with the person below me, I recommend you put this in stanzas to make it more poetic. Good Job :)

[Not A Writer]

Excellent poem. However, if you want to make it more poetic, I highly recommend you put this in stanzas format. Keep on writing. I hope to review more of your writings in the future.