![]() VindicatedA Story by RainbowBangles![]() Dedicated to the old man I saw in the bus , whose story it partly is.![]() |
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Let me know what you think. I met a man in the bus whose story this partly is..The rest is my imagination..
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Hey, not too bad. I enjoyed reading it. But there is one thing I can't keep from saying. When a character thinks, I would personally italicize his/her thoughts instead of encompassing them in quotation marks. It helps the reader distinguish between thought and dialogue, even though you did add the dialogue tag 'he thought angrily.
Overall it was a decent read. Posted 11 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Hey, not too bad. I enjoyed reading it. But there is one thing I can't keep from saying. When a character thinks, I would personally italicize his/her thoughts instead of encompassing them in quotation marks. It helps the reader distinguish between thought and dialogue, even though you did add the dialogue tag 'he thought angrily.
Overall it was a decent read. Posted 11 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on June 14, 2013
Last Updated on June 15, 2013
Tags: shootings, restaurant, old man
1 Review
Added on June 14, 2013
Last Updated on June 15, 2013
Tags: shootings, restaurant, old man
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