Venus Flytrap

The power of a woman

She’s central to the human experience,

we’re all just unknowing participants.

She’ll control you in her experiments,

we’ll succumb to her omnipotence.

One might think of a clever comeback,

speaking with a tongue no one understands,

l’espirit de l’escalier, too late to ever command.

Running fingers down paths of wrongs,

that lead to the warmth of her breast,

put anything in her vicinity,

the goddess will catch and digest.

Eternal games played,

and some of them you may win,

but games are all they’ll ever be.

In the hierarchy of nature, the battle is already over,

our hearts were the victim of theft,

but war does not determine who is right,

it only shows who is left,

and while we may use anger, and power to overpower,

there is one thing that will always remain:

Mars will always surrender

to the hourglass of a Venus flytrap.

Author's Note

Anyone unsure what "l’espirit de l’escalier" means, it is French for "staircase wit" which basically is the phrase for when a person thinks of a clever comeback when it is too late

Reviews

[Citizen Erased]

This is fantastic! Well done.

[Trevor]

This is incredible

[Bette]

i really like this nicely chosen words. well done

[AbsentElements]

It's interesting that you put the whole 'staircase wit' thing in there. This is one of those pieces that makes you think twice about all the things going on in the world today. Very nicely done.

[Ruth]

WOW!
This is excellent!
A great piece of writing!
This is surreal, powerful, wonderful imagery and awesome scanning!
Well thought out love!
Great work!
xx

[Geralyn Miller]

My, my, how very "Y" chrom! Men are only under the illusion they have power because women allow them this delusion. Women are necessary for species survival, men no longer are; so they had best learn to treat women with the respect, honor and human decency we deserve. Men must learn to strive to be wanted; might I suggest a pair of 6 inch stilleto heels and fishnet hose while you clean the house from ceiling to floor, including windows, cook dinner, do the dishes and laundry!

[Crow]

Wonderful piece, your poetic palette captured the true essence of woman.

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

aha there it is i the last two lines
the man may stand alot higher but some woman are every deceiving to not really be the strerotype victims
its written obviously by a male the feminine side to the touch as the softy real ones

[David W Moore III]

btw you don't even win the battles and the war, that ending was written in our genes. Nice poem

[nono]

This is interesting...I like this how you did it and the name this whole thing is just creative!