The Ballad of Olivia & Felix

A love story

They met among friends
in a room full of bends
and twists and turns
as onlookers burned
their cigarettes and emotions
in to the walls of the mind.
In the room of the host,
Mr Felix Zapata,
he took his seat
amongst the chitter and the chatter.
She introduced herself,
Miss Olivia Bonnette,
he made a mental note
that her name he’d soon forget.
A quick dash was made
as he had to maintain,
his duties as a host
lots of people to entertain.
She spoke to others
and they found her rather enchanted,
little did she know
a seed had already been planted.
She left the party a little later,
for her friend was full of fatigue,
Felix had her on his brain,
she left him full of intrigue.

They exchanged numbers
through a friend
and met for coffee
in the middle of Beirut,
they exchanged stories
for hours on end
and she eventually
said he had a face that was cute.
Felix felt happy
that his intrigue carried potential,
the attraction between them
was clearly evidential.
Olivia saw the talent in his eyes
that would soon come out
in a lustful reprise,
Under the guise of love.

Now please do not
take that the wrong way,
there is no need
to paint a dirty picture.
The wonderful madness
presented before you
are the words from the head
of a curly stricture.
To stitch up the reader
with the story of that girl and Felix,
their love hit the flames
like the wings of a fallen phoenix.
For Olivia could not stay in Beirut anymore
and it’s like they say,
“you can take the girl out of the city,
but you can’t take the city out of the girl”,
because although she wasn’t with Felix anymore,
she would live forever in his mind.

Author's Note

I have literally just finished writing this, so it is a rough draft. Any thoughts, comments and suggestions are welcome.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It's like a modern day Bogey/Hepbern story... the story played out nicely in my head.

[Lovelylies;]

Well written, nice flow, kind of inspirational.

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

interesting, but nice great job

[Catonia06]

Interesting :D

[Geralyn Miller]

FYI: I was in Beirut before it was destroyed by many years of war; it was a city of beauty and romance; far more romantic than Paris. (And I was there on business. LOL)
It is a city I could easily see the events depicted in your poem happening.
I enjoyed reading it again, it runs smoother now. Great job.

[Ladysue]

a nice story that flows beautifully...nice work...

[blind poet]

..."under the guise of love" indeed you have painted a most interesting scene..usually I avoid love poems/stories like the plague but this one kept me interested right to the end...but I am always of the mind to wonder what happened next? Hmmm? As you can obviously tell, I enjoyed this piece very much

in poetry,
Dory

[Trevor]

Wow, this is great! sound like something I tried writing befor I started poetry:D

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

quite the tale of love met and divided you've created here~ =)~ I like!~ =)~