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My interpretation of war.

Somewhere where sparks fly,

and explanations require copious use of the exclamation mark,

lies the remains of residents that once lived

in this rural anti-paradise,

swarmed by an abundance of parasites,

forcing heavy plight into the night,

every day and every night,

forcing the fearsome to become fearless,

by joining the fight, only for four days to pass,

and alas! The fight has been fought,

but the sparks still fly as do the exclamation marks,

piercing the ground where families were once found.

Reviews

[Mark]

One Old Writer's Opinion Department: I am opposed to the overuse of the exclamation point, or in fact to superfluous repitition of ANY symbol, or, in fact, WORD! Once tells me the mood, more than once merely tells me of the lack of vocabulary. I know, that is not the core issue of the poem, but I just needed to get it off my chest, (your pardon!)
The poem itself is rather a mystery to me. I saw nothing in it that spoke specifically of war, nor would have come to that conclusion at all had it not been for your introductory note. Are the references to flying sparks somehow allegorical of the "flying" exclamation points "required" by the fear and noise associated with war? And what is the significance of the "four days"? I do see potential here, but I feel (though others may disagree) that it need a bit of pruning.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

A truly wonderful piece...lovely in its honesty...requiring one to stop and think...amazing compilation of elegant words weaved into something beautiful :)

[Seosaimhín]

I really like the way this one flows, and the way you're presenting the tragic reality of war. Thanks for sharing.

[Shelby. Loves ya. :3]

wow. this is...amazing. i like to read about sad things or death. Death had always made me curious. great job

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

very neat, like lightning and dying, scenery

[Geralyn Miller]

Hmmm, I think I briefly lived there in the Texas panhandle.

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

wow, interesting, very good poem nice job

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

enigmatic poetic topography~! ~ a journey for the senses~ thoughtful offering to kick the mind into start~ well composed!~

[wolfshrew]

I really used to be against using a lot of exclamations marks, until i saw learned that your second written line was completely true.

[Talkativeted]

This is a fantastic poem. You really have a way with words.